Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and correct minor grammar (e.g., use past tense consistently and article/number details). Also keep answer under 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes. When I was three my parents and my teacher enrolled me in a piano concert, which was my first formal performance. I was fascinated by the instrument and practiced regularly, and that experience helped me build confidence and a long-term interest in music.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two clear, specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid filler words like 'like' and correct plural/grammar mistakes. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it broadens their skills and can lead to better job prospects. For example, learning teamwork in a sports club and public speaking in a debate group can both improve employability and personal confidence.

× Yes absolutely when I was young my parents and my school teacher signed me up for a piano concert at the time I was only three years old and I was fascinated with piano so that is the greatest opportunity I have had.

✓ Yes, absolutely. When I was young, my parents and my school teacher signed me up for a piano concert. At the time I was only three years old, and I was fascinated with the piano, so that was the greatest opportunity I had.

The sentence contains inconsistent past tense use. Events described (being signed up, being fascinated) occurred in the past, so verbs should consistently be in the past tense. 'Is' and 'have had' are present/present perfect forms that clash with the past narrative. Also add articles ('the piano') and punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense for past events and split into shorter sentences for readability. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× So I believe that people should do a lot of thing.

✓ So I believe that people should do a lot of things.

The noun 'thing' should be plural ('things') when preceded by 'a lot of' which refers to multiple items or activities. Also ensure verb and noun number agreement. Suggestion: use 'things' for general plural activities.