Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, limit to 3–4 sentences, use linking words, and give a specific example. Correct tense and pronouns, and avoid repetition. For instance, name one or two activities and explain one concrete reason or result (confidence, social skills) with a short example.

예시: Yes. My parents often encouraged me to try new activities, such as swimming and running. As a result, I became more confident and learned to meet new people; for example, joining the swim team helped me make friends and overcome my fear of water.

제안: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence, then contrast the two viewpoints using linking words (However, On the other hand) and give a specific example or brief explanation. Fix grammar (e.g., "focus on one area", "trying different things is also useful"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: It depends on a person's goals. If someone aims to excel in one field, focusing on it is best; however, trying different activities can be useful for discovering strengths and interests—for example, experimenting with music and sports helped me decide to pursue athletics.

× When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to try new activities such as swimming, running, try they I think they did this because they wanted me to be more confident and open minded and when it's not when you learn a lot

✓ When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to try new activities such as swimming and running. I think they did this because they wanted me to be more confident and open-minded, and because you learn a lot when you try new things.

The sentence contains incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Try they' is ungrammatical; the verb 'try' should link to 'new things' and use the -ing form for activities (swimming, running). Also punctuation and sentence structure need fixing. Suggestions: separate into two sentences, use 'such as swimming and running', use 'open-minded' with a hyphen, and rephrase to 'you learn a lot when you try new things' to use correct verb forms and clear meaning.

× I think it depends on the person's goals. If someone you know wants to get at one front, focusing and practicing just one is the best, but if you try and differencing it also useful because it helps you to discover what really suits you.

✓ I think it depends on the person's goals. If someone wants to get ahead in one area, focusing on and practicing just one skill is best. But trying different things is also useful because it helps you discover what really suits you.

Multiple structural and word choice errors: 'get at one front' is incorrect — use 'get ahead in one area'. 'Focusing and practicing just one is the best' needs an object: 'focusing on and practicing just one skill'. 'If you try and differencing it also useful' mixes forms; use 'trying different things is also useful'. Suggestions: rephrase unclear idioms, provide direct objects after verbs (focus on X), and use parallel gerund forms ('trying different things') for clarity.