Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer, more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples with correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid repetition and limit to about 2–4 sentences. Also correct verb forms and use singular/plural correctly (e.g., "classes", not "costs").

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I had the chance to try several activities, such as drawing classes and gardening lessons. In addition, my parents enrolled me in English classes to help me learn new skills and discover my interests.

제안: Answer directly, give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly and check grammar (e.g., "things", verb agreement). Keep it natural and concise, 2–3 sentences are enough.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them discover talents and develop new skills. For example, trying a music class or a sport might reveal an ability you never knew you had.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child I had a good opportunity to try many think for example drawing costs and pending costs.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child I had a good opportunity to try many things, for example drawing courses and painting courses.

The original sentence uses 'think' which is a noun/verb unrelated to the intended plural 'things' (singular/plural error) and miswrites 'courses' as 'costs' and 'pending' instead of 'painting'. Also commas are needed to separate clauses. Use 'things' (plural) and the correct nouns 'courses' and 'painting' to convey meaning clearly. Suggested improvement: proofread for homophones and spelling errors, and ensure plural nouns when referring to multiple items.

× Moreover about the English cost, this is because my parents try to support me to find new activity.

✓ Moreover, regarding the English course, it was because my parents tried to support me in finding new activities.

The student uses present tense 'try' while referring to a past situation (past tense needed), and 'cost' is a misspelling of 'course'. Also 'about the English course' should be better phrased as 'regarding the English course', and 'to find new activity' needs plural 'activities' and the preposition 'in'. Suggested improvement: match verb tense to the time frame (use past tense 'tried' for a past event), correct spelling, and use appropriate prepositions ('support me in finding').

× Yes, I think people should try many different thing as they can.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can.

The phrase 'many different thing' is singular when it should be plural; also the word order 'try many different things as they can' is less idiomatic than 'try as many different things as they can'. Suggested improvement: use plural 'things' and the common structure 'try as many X as they can' for clarity.

× This is because it helped them to find their talent or new skill.

✓ This is because it helps them to find their talents or new skills.

Tense mismatch: the context is a general statement about people, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate rather than past 'helped'. Also use plural 'talents'/'skills' to match general reference to people. Suggested improvement: for general truths use present simple and ensure plural forms when speaking generally.

× So I think it's very necessary to find out the different thing as they can.

✓ So I think it's very necessary to find as many different things as they can.

Again 'thing' should be plural 'things' and the idiomatic order is 'find as many different things as they can'. 'Find out' is unnecessary here; 'find' is sufficient. Suggested improvement: use plural nouns and idiomatic comparative structure 'as many ... as'.