Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and correct basic grammar, give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and plural/singular forms, and avoid redundant phrases. Add a linking word to connect reason.

예시: Yes, I had opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents enrolled me in painting classes and piano lessons, so I learned basic drawing techniques and how to read music. As a result, I developed an interest in art and music that I still enjoy today.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid absolute phrases like "everything" and correct verb agreement. Be concise and provide concrete examples or outcomes.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover strengths and gain new skills. For instance, trying sports and coding allowed me to improve teamwork and problem-solving. Therefore, experimenting with different things can help someone find a suitable career or hobby.

× Yes, I have a opportunity to take part in new activities like paintings or play some music instrument because my parents support me.

✓ Yes, I had the opportunity to take part in new activities like painting or playing a musical instrument because my parents supported me.

The sentence has several grammar issues matching the 'Article errors' category and others listed but we only correct those that meet the provided list. 'a opportunity' is incorrect; the correct article is 'the' or 'an' before a vowel sound, but because this refers to a specific past opportunity, 'the opportunity' or simply 'the opportunity' fits; however, to match tense with 'as a child' the past tense is appropriate: change 'have' to 'had' and 'support' to 'supported'. Also 'paintings' should be the gerund 'painting' when listing activities, and 'play some music instrument' should be 'playing a musical instrument'. Suggestion: use correct articles ('a/an/the') and match verb forms when listing activities and maintaining consistent tense.

× Yes, I think it's very good for them if they can try everything as they can.

✓ Yes, I think it's very good for them if they try as many things as they can.

The sentence misuses modal structure and phrasing. Replace 'can try everything as they can' with the more natural conditional 'if they try as many things as they can.' This corrects redundancy and uses the simple present in the if-clause for general truth. Use 'as many things as' to express variety rather than 'everything.'

× This is because it help them to improve their skill and find their talent.

✓ This is because it helps them to improve their skills and find their talents.

The verb 'help' must agree with the singular subject 'it,' so use 'helps.' Also 'skill' and 'talent' should be plural when speaking generally about people: 'skills' and 'talents.' Additionally, after 'helps' omit 'to' before the verb 'find' (either 'help them improve their skills and find their talents' or 'help them to improve...').

× I think it's very good for everyone.

✓ I think it's very good for everyone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It appropriately uses present tense to express a general opinion.