Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and complete the answer with a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences), use linking words to connect ideas, and correct grammar (e.g., use past tense and countable forms). For example, say when and what activities you tried and one benefit you gained.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I took swimming lessons from age seven and joined a school drama club at ten, which helped me become more confident speaking in public. Because of these experiences, I learned to overcome nervousness and make new friends.

제안: Make your opinion clear with one strong topic sentence, then add two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example, and as a result). Avoid repetition and improve grammar (use articles and correct verb forms). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, people should try a variety of activities because it broadens their skills and perspectives. For example, learning a new language can improve career chances, and trying different hobbies can reduce stress. As a result, these experiences often lead to personal growth and a better quality of life.

× I think I had a lot of chances and the opportunities from a childhood until this age.

✓ I think I had a lot of chances and opportunities from childhood until now.

The definite article 'the' before 'opportunities' and 'a' before 'childhood' are incorrect here. 'Childhood' used in a general temporal sense does not need an article, and 'opportunities' does not need 'the' when speaking generally. Use 'now' instead of 'this age' for natural expression.

× So I got a lot of

✓ So I got a lot of experience.

The original fragment is incomplete and leaves the object unstated. Completing the sentence with a noun ('experience') corrects the sentence structure and matches the context of gaining experiences from activities.

× Of course I think the people should try to different things within their lifetime because if they are trying lot of new things they can they can gain lot of experience and they can level up their lifestyle to the next level

✓ Of course I think people should try different things during their lifetime because if they try a lot of new things they can gain a lot of experience and improve their lifestyle.

Several pronoun and determiner issues: 'the people' is unnatural; use 'people' for general statements. 'Try to different things' should be 'try different things' (no 'to'). Repeated 'they can' is redundant. Use consistent verb forms: 'if they try' (simple present) matches the general conditional. Add articles: 'a lot of' before 'new things' and 'a lot of experience'. 'Level up their lifestyle to the next level' is wordy and idiomatic; 'improve their lifestyle' is clearer.