Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague time phrases and incorrect verb forms. For example, say whether you had opportunities, mention one or two activities you did or did not do, and give a brief reason. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. I mainly focused on my studies and helped with household chores, so I rarely joined clubs or sports teams. As a result, I had little time to explore other interests.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with two concise, specific reasons connected by linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'so'). Use correct verb forms and natural collocations (e.g., 'travel', 'join clubs', 'take international trips'). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid listing without structure.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover new interests and develop skills. For example, joining a club or playing a sport can improve teamwork, while traveling exposes you to new cultures and ideas.

× No, I don't have any opportunity to take care new activities as a child because in my childhood era I already have one opportunity to study and do some work.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because during my childhood I only had one opportunity to study and do some work.

The speaker mixes present tense ('don't have') with past context ('as a child'). Use simple past 'didn't have' and plural 'opportunities' for general count. 'Take care new activities' is incorrect collocation; use 'take part in new activities'. 'In my childhood era' is awkward; use 'during my childhood'. Also change 'I already have one opportunity' to past 'I only had one opportunity' to match past time frame and improve clarity.

× Yes, people try many things and they can like they go in to travel, they make fun, they go in clubs, they play sports, they go international tours people have different things to do.

✓ Yes, people should try many things; for example, they can travel, have fun, go to clubs, play sports, or go on international tours—people have different things to do.

The original uses present tense inconsistently and has incorrect expressions. Use 'should try' or 'can try' to match the question's modal sense; here 'should try' is appropriate. Replace 'they go in to travel' with 'they can travel', 'they make fun' with 'have fun', 'go in clubs' with 'go to clubs', and 'go international tours' with 'go on international tours'. Add connectors and punctuation to separate ideas and improve readability.