Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorer la précision grammaticale et l'orthographe des mots, simplifier la structure des phrases et ajouter un lien logique entre les idées. Par exemple, corriger les temps verbaux (utiliser le passé simple ou le prétérit pour des actions terminées), orthographier correctement le vocabulaire (badminton), éviter les répétitions, et utiliser un mot de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I tried new activities like badminton, dance and tennis. I especially enjoyed playing badminton with my friends at the local court because it was social and energetic, which always made me happy.

제안: Rendre la réponse plus directe et organisée : commencer par une phrase claire exprimant l'opinion, puis donner deux raisons liées par des connecteurs. Améliorer la précision lexicale (use 'definitely' instead of 'absolutely yes') et la cohérence en utilisant des mots de liaison comme 'for example' ou 'because'.

예시: Yes, I definitely think people should try different things. Trying new activities helps you develop new skills and meet people; for example, taking up a sport can improve fitness and teamwork, while learning a hobby can boost creativity and confidence.

× When I was a child I had taken in new activities such as Baddamington, Dance and tennis.

✓ When I was a child I took part in new activities such as badminton, dance and tennis.

The original uses 'had taken in' which incorrectly applies the past perfect and the wrong verb for participation. Use simple past 'took part in' to describe completed actions in childhood. Also correct spelling ('badminton') and lowercase common nouns ('dance', 'tennis'). Suggestion: use simple past for past events and the verb phrase 'take part in' (past: 'took part in').

× I really enjoy the time to play with my friends in Baddamton Court.

✓ I really enjoyed playing with my friends on the badminton court.

The sentence mixes present tense 'enjoy' with a past context and uses wrong preposition and noun form. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'When I was a child' and the gerund 'playing' after 'enjoyed'. Use preposition 'on' with 'court' and correct spelling 'badminton'. Suggestion: match tense, use gerund after 'enjoy/ enjoyed', and use 'on the court'.

× It makes me feel very happy.

✓ It made me feel very happy.

The context is a past time ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change present 'makes' to past 'made' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: keep tense consistent throughout a description of past events.

× People should always make progress in their life.

✓ People should always make progress in their lives.

The modal 'should' is fine but the noun phrase 'their life' is better as plural 'their lives' to agree with the plural subject 'people'. Suggestion: use plural possessive when referring to multiple people individually.

× So it's absolutely yes such as in the free time they can do some sports and learn some new skills, it will be helpful for their development.

✓ So the answer is absolutely yes: in their free time they can do sports and learn new skills, which will be helpful for their development.

The original is disfluent and has punctuation and clause-connection issues. 'It's absolutely yes' is informal and awkward; rephrase to 'the answer is absolutely yes'. Use 'in their free time' not 'in the free time'. Remove 'some' before plural 'sports' and use a relative clause 'which will be helpful' to link ideas. Suggestion: simplify structure, use appropriate connectors and relative clauses for clarity.