Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện tính rõ ràng và cấu trúc câu. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Yes, I did” hoặc “No, I didn’t”), sau đó nêu chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ những hoạt động bạn thử, khi nào, với ai và cảm nhận của bạn). Tránh tiếng ồn lời (umm, MMM) và lỗi ngữ pháp. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý như “but”, “however”, “for example”.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I tried several new activities like swimming and painting at school clubs. For example, I joined the swimming club for a year and improved my confidence in the water. Although I didn’t enjoy all activities, trying them helped me discover my interests.

제안: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và liên kết ý. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) và nêu lý do hợp lý, kèm ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh phát ngôn không rõ (“I am shooter pupil”) và lặp từ “umm”. Sử dụng liên từ để làm rõ lý do (because, so, for example) và giữ trong 1-4 câu.

예시: Yes, I think people should try different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover what they enjoy. For example, trying a new sport or hobby can improve health and reduce stress. Of course, people should balance trying new activities with their studies or work.

× MMM add a try. I don't enjoy anything for activity.

✓ I didn't really try many activities. I didn't enjoy any of them.

The original contains fragmented and unclear phrases; 'add a try' is not idiomatic and 'for activity' is incorrect. Use past tense to match 'as a child' question. Suggest using complete clauses: 'I didn't really try many activities' and 'I didn't enjoy any of them.' This corrects sentence structure and verb usage.

× Yes umm I am shooter pupil. We will go try to and think umm exam for umm take.

✓ Yes. I was a shy pupil. We used to try things, and I thought a lot about exams.

Multiple errors: 'shooter pupil' is likely a misselection for 'shy pupil'; tense should reflect past experience (as a child), so use past tense 'was' and 'used to.' The original 'We will go try to and think umm exam for umm take' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'We used to try things, and I thought a lot about exams.' This fixes sentence structure, tense consistency, and clarity.