Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tenses and articles, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid run-on sentences and keep the response to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents encouraged me to join different clubs. For example, I joined the school painting club, and over a year I learned to draw landscapes and portraits. As a result, my confidence improved and I became more willing to try creative tasks.

제안: Focus on natural phrasing, correct grammar and clearer examples. Use linking words to organize the answer (e.g., 'firstly', 'for example', 'therefore'), correct word choice (e.g., 'short course' not 'assured curse'), and avoid vague phrases like 'heightened talents'. Keep answer to 2–4 sentences with specific benefits.

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities because it helps them learn new skills and discover strengths. For example, doing volunteer work or taking a short course in coding can teach practical skills and make a CV stronger. Therefore, exploring options can improve career prospects and personal growth.

× Yes I have many opportunities to try new activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child.

The context refers to childhood, a past time, so the past tense 'had' is required instead of present 'have'. Use past tense to match time reference and keep verb tense consistent. Suggestion: Use past simple for events that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had many opportunities').

× My parents often encouraged me to join the school painting club and I learnt to draw beautiful pictures which boost my confidence

✓ My parents often encouraged me to join the school painting club, and I learnt to draw beautiful pictures, which boosted my confidence.

Mixed tenses: 'encouraged' and 'learnt' are correct past verbs, but 'boost' is present; it should be past 'boosted' to match the past context. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same time frame when describing a sequence of past events; use commas to separate clauses for readability.

× Yeah, I think people should explore different activities when possible because experiencing new things help you gain useful knowledge and discover heightened talents.

✓ Yeah, I think people should explore different activities when possible because experiencing new things helps you gain useful knowledge and discover hidden talents.

Subject-verb agreement with a gerund subject: 'experiencing new things' is singular, so the verb must be 'helps' not 'help'. Also 'heightened talents' is awkward; 'hidden talents' is a common collocation. Suggestion: Match verb number to the gerund subject ('experiencing... helps') and choose natural adjective-noun collocations ('hidden talents').

× For example, trying volunteer work or small assured curse can improve your skills and make future career

✓ For example, trying volunteer work or small assured courses can improve your skills and help your future career.

Multiple errors: 'small assured curse' contains wrong words: 'curse' should be 'course' and 'assured' is inappropriate; likely 'short' or 'small' course is intended. Also 'make future career' is ungrammatical; use 'help your future career' or 'improve your future career prospects'. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary ('short course') and complete noun phrases ('help your future career' or 'improve your future career prospects').