Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar mistakes (use past tense consistently, avoid awkward phrases like "keep the ball keeping balance"). Also reduce redundancy and limit to max 5 sentences.

예시: Yes — I joined a table tennis club when I was a child. Although table tennis is very popular in China, I found it quite difficult because I struggled with controlling the ball and keeping my shots consistent. However, practicing regularly helped me improve my coordination and enjoy the sport more.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like "as more as possible" and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "broaden their horizons"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many new activities because it broadens their horizons and helps them discover new interests. For example, trying a new sport or hobby can improve skills and confidence, and sometimes it even leads to lasting friendships.

× Yes, I did when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child.

No change needed: sentence correctly uses past tense 'did' to answer a past-time question. Keep as is.

× I took part in a table tennis club.

✓ I took part in a table tennis club.

No change needed: 'took part' correctly uses past tense to describe a childhood activity.

× Learning table tennis is very popular in China, but it is really tough for me.

✓ Playing table tennis is very popular in China, but it was really tough for me.

Use 'playing' instead of 'learning' because native speakers typically say 'playing table tennis' when referring to the activity. Also change present 'is' to past 'was' to match the context (the student is talking about their experience as a child). This fixes tense consistency and choice of verb form.

× I can't keep the ball keeping balance.

✓ I couldn't keep the ball balanced.

Several issues: 'can't' should be past 'couldn't' to match childhood context. 'Keep the ball keeping balance' is ungrammatical — use the adjective 'balanced' after 'keep the ball' or say 'keep the ball under control.' The corrected version uses 'couldn't keep the ball balanced' for clarity and correct participle/adjective use.

× Oh yes, of course I think people should try different new things as more as possible because it's a good opportunity to expand their vision and horizons.

✓ Oh yes, of course I think people should try as many new things as possible because it's a good opportunity to expand their vision and horizons.

Problems corrected: 'as more as possible' is incorrect — use the quantifier phrase 'as many ... as possible.' The word order 'different new things' is awkward; 'as many new things as possible' is natural. Also remove redundant 'different.' The rest of the sentence is acceptable; 'vision and horizons' is slightly redundant but tolerable.