Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音と文法の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくいです。まず文を明確なトピック文にしてから、1〜2文で具体的な詳細を付け加えてください。例えば“there was a club that students had to take”のように語彙（club）と語順（students had to）を修正し、過去形や冠詞を正しく使う練習をしてください。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, so）を使って理由や結果を示すと会話がより自然になります。

예시: Yes, I did. In primary school there was a club that every student had to join, and I remember trying pottery classes. For example, I learned how to shape clay and enjoyed working with my hands, which encouraged me to be more creative.

제안: 文が途切れており、意味が曖昧です。まず明確な意見文を一文で言い、その後に理由を1〜2文で示してください。理由を述べる際は具体例や結果を挙げ、接続詞（because, so, therefore, for example）で文をつなげる練習をしてください。語彙も簡潔で適切な語を使い（e.g. “gain new skills” “broaden their perspective”）表現を明確にしましょう。

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them gain new skills and broaden their perspective. For example, learning a musical instrument taught me patience and improved my concentration, which also helped me at school.

× In my primary school there was a crab that student had to take necessarily

✓ In my primary school there was a club that students had to join.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'crab' is likely a typo for 'club', 'student' should be plural 'students' for general statement (singular/plural issue and subject-verb agreement), word order is awkward and 'had to take necessarily' is ungrammatical. Use 'had to join' to express compulsory participation. Suggestion: replace incorrect word 'crab' with 'club', make 'students' plural, and use 'had to join' for clarity.

× Yes, I think so experiencing new things make people have new term stays say things

✓ Yes, I think so. Experiencing new things makes people have new perspectives and say different things.

The sentence lacks punctuation and has subject-verb agreement errors: the gerund 'Experiencing' is singular and requires the singular verb 'makes' (not 'make'). Phrases 'have new term stays' and 'say things' are unclear; likely intended 'have new perspectives and say different things.' Suggestion: add a period after 'so', capitalize 'Experiencing', use 'makes', and replace unclear phrases with clearer nouns and adjectives.