Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接和自然，首先用一句主题句明确说明有没有机会，然后用1–2句具体细节说明活动类型、频率和带来的好处。注意语法和词汇搭配，避免冗余。例如将“more practice, more outside activity”改为“more outdoor activities and practice”，把“social communicate skills”改为“social and communication skills”。最后保持句子不超过5句，使用连接词如“so”或“therefore”使逻辑更清楚。

예시: Yes, I did. My parents encouraged me to try various activities, so I often attended drawing classes and outdoor games. These activities helped me improve my social and communication skills and made me more confident interacting with peers.

제안: 回答要更简洁、语法正确并给出原因或例子支持观点。主题句直接回答问题，然后用1–2句说明原因或结果，使用正确的时态和搭配（如“if you don't try”而不是“didn't tried”）。可以加入具体例子或对比来增强说服力。

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different things. If you don't try new experiences, you may never discover your strengths, so being willing to experiment can lead to personal growth and unexpected opportunities.

× Yes, my parents prepared it for me.

✓ Yes, my parents prepared it for me. -> Yes, my parents prepared opportunities for me.

原句中的 it 指代不明且用法不自然。这里要表达“为我准备了机会/活动”，应使用复数名词如 opportunities 或 activities 来明确指代。建议将 it 改为具体名词以使句子清晰。

× They think the kids need them more practice, more outside activity, so improve their social communicate skills.

✓ They think kids need more practice and more outdoor activities to improve their social communication skills.

原句存在多处问题：1) 使用了不恰当的代词 them（多余且错误）；2) practice 前不需要冠词 them，应使用 more practice（量词问题）；3) outside activity 应为 outdoor activities（可数名词复数）；4) communicate skills 应为 communication skills（名词形式）。综上应调整为更自然的表达。

× So I joined the drawing classes and I usually drop the picture with my friends, telephone my life.

✓ So I joined drawing classes, and I usually drew pictures with my friends and talked about our lives on the phone.

原句时态和动词形式混乱：1) joined 是过去时，后面却用 usually 表达习惯动作，应统一时态或用过去习惯表达（usually drew）；2) drop the picture 用法错误，应为 draw pictures（画画）；3) telephone my life 不合逻辑，应为 talk about our lives on the phone（在电话里谈论我们的生活）。建议使用一致的过去习惯时态或改为现在时描述一般习惯。

× Of course, I think life is full of challenge and then if you didn't tried it, you never know how best you can did it.

✓ Of course. I think life is full of challenges, and if you don't try things, you'll never know how well you can do them.

原句问题包括：1) challenge 应为复数 challenges（名词复数错误）；2) 条件句时态使用错误：if 从句应用一般现在时 don't try，而不是 didn't tried（过去式和双重时态错误）；3) 主句应使用将来/情态结构 you'll never know 或 can 的正确形式：how well you can do them（不能用 did）。建议遵循第一条件句结构（If + present, will/can + base verb）。

× So I think people need to be brave and try everything they wanted to do.

✓ So I think people need to be brave and try everything they want to do.

原句中 wanted 使用了过去式，但句意是在一般情况下的建议，应使用一般现在时 want。将 wanted 改为 want 以匹配主句的时态和语气。