Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体不错：回答直接、连贯且有具体例子。但可改进处包括：1) 开头可用更自然的口语衔接词（例如“Yeah”或“Definitely”）减少书面语感；2) 用一两个连词（e.g. however, eventually）使段落逻辑更清晰；3) 适当使用更丰富的词汇替换重复词（如替换“hard”或“fell”）。此外可把句子数控制在4-5句内，避免过长。举例中可给出更具体的细节（例如练习的内容或学会后做了什么）。

예시: Definitely — when I was eight my father encouraged me to learn to ride a bike. At first it was really difficult because I kept falling and losing my balance, but my dad practiced with me every weekend and taught me how to steer and brake safely. Eventually I stopped falling and could ride confidently around the park, which made me feel much more independent.

제안: 回答清晰且观点明确，有原因和例子支持，但可以提升的地方：1) 开头用更自然的口语表达（如“Yes, I think so”）使语气更地道；2) 使用连接词（for example, moreover, therefore）增强逻辑流畅性；3) 提供更具体的例子或对比（例如说明一种具体爱好带来的技能或社交场景），增加细节深度；4) 可加入简短结论句收尾。

예시: Yes, I think so. Trying different activities lets people broaden their horizons and gain useful skills; for example, joining a drama club can improve public speaking and help you make friends. Moreover, experimenting with various hobbies helps you discover what you really enjoy, so you can focus on activities that suit your strengths.

× Of course, when I was 8 years old, my father encouraged me to learn to ride a bike.

✓ Of course, when I was 8 years old, my father encouraged me to learn to ride a bike.

该句语法正确；时态、人称和数都与语境一致。

× It was hard at first because I kept falling, but my dad supported me and practiced with me every weekend for a few weeks.

✓ It was hard at first because I kept falling, but my dad supported me and practiced with me every weekend for a few weeks.

该句语法正确。过去进行/过去常态（kept falling, supported, practiced）与叙述过去经历的语境一致。

× After I finally learned, I felt much more confident and independent.

✓ After I finally learned, I felt much more confident and independent.

该句语法正确。时态和句子结构适合描述过去完成的经历。

× In my view, the answer is yes.

✓ In my view, the answer is yes.

该句语法正确。现在时用于表达观点是恰当的。

× By learning different things, we can broaden our horizons and discover new opportunities.

✓ By learning different things, we can broaden our horizons and discover new opportunities.

该句语法正确。动名词短语作方式状语，can 表示能力/可能性，均使用得当。

× For instance, trying a new hobby helps us develop new skills and meet new people.

✓ For instance, trying a new hobby helps us develop new skills and meet new people.

该句语法正确。主语、谓语一致，动词不定式和并列结构使用恰当。