Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a brief reason. Use linking words (for example, also) and correct tense/grammar (e.g., "I had" instead of "I have" for past). Keep it under five sentences.

예시: I had many opportunities to try new activities at school because my parents encouraged me to join them. For example, every Friday the school organised sports and clubs, and I took part in debate, races, badminton and volleyball. These activities helped me build confidence and improve my teamwork and communication skills.

제안: Make a direct opinion sentence, then give two clear reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Be specific about the benefits and finish the thought. Keep responses within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them gain new experiences and learn useful skills. For instance, trying a variety of hobbies can improve problem-solving and communication. Moreover, these experiences may open up career opportunities or help people adapt to new situations in life.

× Yes, I have plenty of opportunities provided with my parents in school so I participate in various activities like debate, race, badminton, volleyball as in every Friday, my school organise that type of activity.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities provided by my parents and at school, so I participated in various activities like debates, races, badminton and volleyball; every Friday my school organised those activities.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'have' should be past 'had' because the question asks about childhood (past). 'provided with my parents in school' is incorrect preposition and structure; use 'provided by my parents and at school'. 'debate, race' should be plural 'debates, races' (singular/plural issue). 'as in every Friday' is wrong preposition and phrasing; use 'every Friday'. 'organise' should be past 'organised' to match past tense and third person singular agreement; also 'that type of activity' is awkward so use 'those activities'. Suggestions: maintain past tense consistently for past events, use 'by' for the agent of providing, pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple occurrences, and ensure subject-verb agreement in past ('organised').

× So I participate in the activity to improve my performance.

✓ I participated in those activities to improve my performance.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence uses present 'participate' while speaking about past events; change to past 'participated'. Also use plural 'those activities' to refer back to multiple activities. Suggestion: keep the same past tense throughout when describing childhood experiences.

× Yes the people should try many things they can as it will be very helpful to gain new experience which can be further use in future so it will help them to develop their attitude and skills and it will it can be means of life in the

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can, because it is very helpful for gaining new experiences that can be used in the future; this helps them develop their attitudes and skills and can be a means of improving their lives.

Several problems: word order and missing words in 'try many things they can' — use 'try as many different things as they can' (incorrect conjunction/structure). 'will be very helpful to gain new experience' should be 'is very helpful for gaining new experiences' (preposition and gerund use). 'which can be further use in future' has wrong verb form 'use' should be past participle 'used' or 'can be used' and missing article 'the future'. 'it will it can be means of life' is ungrammatical redundancy and wrong noun phrase; simplify to 'can be a means of improving their lives'. Suggestions: use modal 'should' correctly with phrase 'as ... as', use gerunds after 'for', use 'used' for passive sense, include articles like 'the future', avoid redundant modals, and choose clear noun phrases.