Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı ve dilbilgisi ile kelime kullanımındaki hatalar düzeltilmelidir. Ayrıca bağlaçlar kullanılarak destekleyici ayrıntılar mantıklı sırayla verilmelidir. Örneğin, “When I was a child, I tried many activities because my family encouraged me” gibi açık bir giriş yapın; ardından spesifik örnekler ve günümüzde devam eden bir etkinlik ekleyin. Cümleleri 3-5 arasında tutun ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

예시: When I was a child, I tried many different activities because my family encouraged me to explore new things. For example, I took courses in volleyball, gymnastics, Taekwondo and tennis. I still play tennis now, so trying these activities helped me find what I enjoy.

제안: Cevap doğrudan görüşle başlamalı ve gerekçeler mantıklı bağlantılarla desteklenmelidir. Dolaylı ifadeler ve dolgu kelimeler yerine net nedenler verin (ör. beceri geliştirme, ilgi keşfetme). Bir veya iki spesifik gerekçe ve kısa bir sonuç cümlesi ekleyin. Cümle uzunluğunu 2–4 cümlede tutun.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For instance, learning a sport or a musical instrument can build discipline and confidence. Therefore, trying new activities can benefit people throughout their lives.

× When I was child, I was trying a lot of activities because my family is want to undo anything and it's so good for me and I, for example, I went volleyball course, gymnastics, Taekwondo, tennis and I playing tennis now too and it's like this.

✓ When I was a child, I tried a lot of activities because my family wanted me to do many things and it was very good for me. For example, I took a volleyball course, did gymnastics, practiced Taekwondo and played tennis, and I still play tennis now.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure and tense issues: missing article 'a' before 'child' (article error, ID 22), incorrect use of past continuous 'was trying' where simple past 'tried' fits (tense issue, ID 6), wrong verb forms 'is want' and 'undo' which are ungrammatical (pronoun/verb usage and word choice; treat as sentence structure error ID 26), and run‑on structure lacking proper sentence boundaries. Also 'went volleyball course' is incorrect; use 'took a volleyball course' or 'did gymnastics' and 'played tennis'. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use simple past for completed childhood actions, correct article use, and use appropriate verbs for activities. Replace incorrect verbs with standard collocations (take a course, do gymnastics, practice Taekwondo, play tennis).

× my family is want to undo anything

✓ my family wanted me to do many things

The phrase 'is want' is incorrect: after a subject you need the correct verb form. For past meaning use 'wanted' (third person singular past of 'want'). Also 'undo anything' is wrong word choice; use 'do many things' or 'try many things'. Suggestion: match verb form to subject and tense (my family wanted), and choose appropriate verbs/phrases (do/try many things).

× and I playing tennis now too

✓ and I still play tennis now

'I playing' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous. However, when stating habitual action 'now' or 'still', simple present 'I still play' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'I am playing' for current continuous action or 'I still play' for habitual action; ensure auxiliary verbs are present when using -ing forms.

× I went volleyball course

✓ I took a volleyball course

English collocations require 'take' a course, not 'go'/'went' with the noun 'course'. Use 'took a volleyball course' for past. Suggestion: learn common verb + noun collocations (take a course, do gymnastics).

× I agree this opinion because of uh, people try different things, they just think to do something little but it's not they have a a big experience for a they will uh, use for a whole life.

✓ I agree with this opinion because when people try different things they may only attempt small tasks, but they gain valuable experience that they can use throughout their lives.

The original sentence has multiple structural and grammatical problems: missing preposition 'with' after 'agree' (preposition error ID 11), comma splice and confused clauses, awkward phrasing 'think to do something little' and 'it's not they have a a big experience'. Tense and meaning are mixed. Suggestion: use 'agree with', join clauses properly, rephrase to express meaning clearly using simple present for general truths and correct noun phrases ('valuable experience', 'throughout their lives').