Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with correct articles and verb forms. Use linking words for clarity. For example, say what you did, when or how often, and one short detail about each activity.

예시: Yes — I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I attended a ballet class for two years and learned basic techniques and posture. I also joined an ice-skating class once a week, which helped me improve balance, and I took swimming lessons during the summer to build confidence in the water.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with two clear reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., remove extra 'to' and duplicate words). Be specific about how trying things helps (skills, career decisions, enjoyment).

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things. First, it helps them discover interests and develop useful skills — for instance, volunteering can build communication skills. Second, trying new activities can guide future career choices because practical experience reveals what you enjoy and are good at.

× For example, I have joined ballet class, a ice skating class or even swimming class and to explore my own.

✓ For example, I joined a ballet class, an ice-skating class, or even a swimming class to explore myself.

The original sentence mixes present perfect ('have joined') with a list of past activities and contains article errors ('a ice skating') and an unnecessary infinitive phrase 'and to explore my own'. Use simple past 'joined' for past experiences that are completed. Also use 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds ('an ice-skating class'). 'Explore myself' is the correct reflexive phrase rather than 'explore my own'. Remove the extra conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for completed childhood activities, correct articles, hyphenate compound nouns like 'ice-skating', and use the reflexive pronoun 'myself'.

× For example, I have joined ballet class, a ice skating class or even swimming class and to explore my own.

✓ For example, I joined a ballet class, an ice-skating class, or even a swimming class to explore myself.

There are missing and incorrect articles: 'ballet class' needs 'a' ('a ballet class'), 'a ice skating class' should be 'an ice-skating class' because 'ice' begins with a vowel sound, and 'swimming class' needs 'a'. Ensure articles are consistent before each countable noun. Suggestion: Place appropriate articles before each singular countable noun ('a ballet class', 'an ice-skating class', 'a swimming class').

× For example, I have joined ballet class, a ice skating class or even swimming class and to explore my own.

✓ For example, I joined a ballet class, an ice-skating class, or even a swimming class to explore myself.

The phrase 'explore my own' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun is 'myself' when the subject and object are the same person. Use 'to explore myself' to show the speaker was discovering their own interests. Suggestion: Use reflexive pronouns ('myself') when the subject performs an action on themselves.

× Oh sure, people should try out new things and get out of their comfort zone and to find out what their hobby is and maybe to develop their their future and to follow the way for their future career.

✓ Oh sure, people should try out new things, get out of their comfort zones, find out what their hobbies are, and maybe develop their future careers and follow a path toward them.

The original sentence mixes forms: it uses infinitives inconsistently ('to find out', 'to develop') after coordinating verbs where bare infinitives or parallel structures are preferred. Also 'comfort zone' should be plural when speaking about people in general ('comfort zones'), 'hobby is' should be pluralized for 'people' ('hobbies are'), and 'their their' is duplicated. Maintain parallel structure: use base verbs after 'should' (try, get, find) or consistently use 'to' infinitives. Also 'develop their future' is vague; use 'develop their future careers' and 'follow a path toward them'. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel after modal verbs (should + base verb), pluralize nouns to match plural subjects, remove duplicate words, and clarify phrasing for career development.

× Oh sure as a kid, I used to have opportunities to try out new things in my spare time.

✓ Oh sure, as a kid I had opportunities to try out new things in my spare time.

The phrase 'used to have opportunities' is wordy; 'had opportunities' or 'used to try' is clearer. No quantifier error per se, but simplifying improves fluency. Also add a comma placement adjustment. Maintain simple past 'had' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: Use concise past-tense phrasing for habitual childhood actions: 'as a kid I had opportunities' or 'as a kid I used to try out new things'.