Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (repeated 'like'), correct vocabulary (e.g. bungee, zipline or 'zip wire'), and add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. As a child I enjoyed trying thrilling activities such as bungee jumping and riding a very high swing. However, my parents were afraid for my safety, so they often discouraged me from doing them. Even so, I remember feeling excited and curious whenever I had the chance.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word (e.g. 'because' or 'for example'). Fix grammar (use past tense and correct expressions: 'I liked playing the piano', 'it was too hard for me', 'I didn’t practice enough'). Limit to 2–3 supporting sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover new interests and skills. For example, I tried learning the piano when I lived in Korea, but it was too difficult for me at the time because I didn’t practice regularly. Trying different activities taught me what I enjoy and what I need to work on.

× Yes when I was a child I liked doing like scary things like for example like bongee jumping or like super high swing or jip mine. I like but my mom and dad scary about that.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked doing scary things, for example bungee jumping, a very high swing, or zip-line. I liked them, but my mom and dad were scared about that.

Errors: incorrect gerund usage and informal fillers 'like' repeated; misspelled activity names; adjective/adverb issues. Corrections: use gerund 'doing' correctly and remove extra 'like' fillers; use correct nouns 'bungee jumping' and 'zip-line'; use plural 'them' to refer to activities; use past tense verb 'were scared' to describe parents' state. Suggestion: avoid filler 'like', use precise nouns, ensure subject and verb agree and use correct past-tense forms. Grammar problem types involved: #8 Verb + -ing form for 'doing', #1 Singular and plural for 'them', #5 Past tense issue for 'were scared', #13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs for 'scary' vs 'scared'. Please focus on reducing fillers and checking verb forms.

× Yes, when I was in Korea I like doing piano but it's too hard to me but I think other people can do it better than me because I didn't try very hard.

✓ Yes, when I was in Korea I liked playing the piano, but it was too hard for me. I think other people can do it better than I could because I didn't try very hard.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'like' used for past context; wrong verb collocation 'doing piano' instead of 'playing the piano'; incorrect phrasing 'too hard to me' should be 'too hard for me'; pronoun/comparison 'better than me' is informal—use 'better than I could' or 'better than me' depending on formality. Corrections: change to past tense 'liked', use 'playing the piano', 'was too hard for me', and 'better than I could'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame, use correct collocations for musical instruments, and use 'for' after 'too hard'. Grammar problem types involved: #6 Present tense issue (used present where past required), #13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, #11 Incorrect use of prepositions ('for').