Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add one or two specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why and give an example. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with a short connector.

예시: Yes. I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents often worked outdoors and involved me in their hobbies. For example, they taught me to ride a bicycle when I was seven and later enrolled me in swimming lessons, so I learned practical skills and became more confident.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific benefits with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases and finish the thought. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, people should try different things whenever possible because it broadens their skills and helps them discover new interests. For instance, learning a new language can improve job prospects, and trying various sports can boost physical health and confidence.

× When I was a child, I have a lot of opportunity to take a new activity like ride bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoy to work outside.

✓ When I was a child, I had a lot of opportunities to try new activities like riding a bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoyed working outside.

Tense consistency: 'When I was a child' sets past time, so verbs should be past tense ('had', 'enjoyed'). Number and article errors: 'a lot of opportunity' should be plural 'a lot of opportunities'. Verb forms: after 'try' or 'try new activities like' use gerunds for activities ('riding a bicycle', 'swimming'). Preposition and collocation: 'enjoy to work outside' is incorrect; use 'enjoyed working outside'. Suggestion: Maintain past tense throughout, pluralize count nouns, and use gerunds for activities.

× When I was a child, I have a lot of opportunity to take a new activity like ride bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoy to work outside. That's why I have a lot of opportunity to do.

✓ When I was a child, I had a lot of opportunities to try new activities like riding a bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoyed working outside. That's why I had many opportunities to do so.

Pluralization and article use: 'a lot of opportunity' is incorrect; use 'a lot of opportunities' or 'many opportunities'. Repetition and pronoun reference: 'That's why I have a lot of opportunity to do.' is awkward and tenses mismatch; use past 'had' and 'do so' or 'do them'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for countable nouns and keep tense consistent.

× When I was a child, I have a lot of opportunity to take a new activity like ride bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoy to work outside.

✓ When I was a child, I had a lot of opportunities to try new activities like riding a bicycle or swimming because most of my parents really enjoyed working outside.

Gerund after verbs and in lists: activities are expressed with gerunds ('riding', 'swimming') not base verbs ('ride'). Also after 'try' or 'activities like' use '-ing' forms. Suggestion: Use gerunds to list activities and after verbs that take '-ing' structures.

× most of my parents really enjoy to work outside

✓ most of my parents really enjoyed working outside

The verb 'enjoy' is not followed by 'to' plus infinitive; it is followed by a gerund. Also 'outside' as an adverb is fine but 'working outside' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy' + gerund and match tense to context.

× Yes, people should try different things if they have a chance because it will lead to several positive things if you have different things that you can do with

✓ Yes, people should try different things if they have a chance because it will lead to several positive outcomes if you have a variety of things you can do.

Tense and clarity: 'should try' is modal present and is fine; however the sentence ends awkwardly 'you can do with' which is incomplete. Word choice: use 'positive outcomes' instead of 'positive things' and 'a variety of things' instead of repeated 'different things'. Suggestion: Complete the clause and choose clearer nouns to avoid repetition.

× Yes, people should try different things if they have a chance because it will lead to several positive things if you have different things that you can do with

✓ Yes, people should try different things if they have a chance because it will lead to several positive outcomes when you have a variety of skills and activities you can do.

The original sentence contains a dangling preposition and repetitive phrasing making it ungrammatical. 'that you can do with' is incomplete and confusing. Suggestion: Restructure the sentence to remove redundancy and finish the thought, e.g., 'when you have a variety of skills and activities you can do.'