Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and ungrammatical. Give a direct topic sentence that answers the question (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise and natural (max 4–5 sentences).

예시: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, my school didn’t offer extracurricular clubs, and my family was busy so I couldn’t join sports teams. As a result, I mostly spent my free time studying and helping at home.

제안: Your answer shows an opinion but is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then use linking words (for example, moreover, because) to give two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating words and finish with a short conclusion sentence.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover their interests and build new skills. For example, trying sports like cricket or volleyball can improve teamwork and fitness, while learning music or painting can boost creativity. Therefore, exploring different activities is beneficial for personal growth.

× As a child I have no activities to develop in activities.

✓ As a child I had no activities to develop my skills.

The original sentence uses the present tense 'have' but the question asks about childhood (past). This is a tense error (present vs past). Also the phrase 'develop in activities' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should specify what was developed (e.g. 'my skills'). Suggest using past tense 'had' and a clear object: 'had no activities to develop my skills.' Suggestions: use past tense when speaking about past periods, replace vague or repeated words ('activities') with a clear noun ('skills').

× I think they will still try to many things like different like playing cricket, volleyball and other activities that will.

✓ I think they should try many different things, such as playing cricket, volleyball and other activities.

The original contains several problems: the modal 'will' is inappropriate for giving advice — use 'should' for recommendation; 'to many things' incorrectly includes 'to' and should be 'many'; 'different like' is redundant and ungrammatical; the clause ends with an incomplete phrase 'that will.' This is a modal verb and sentence structure issue. Suggestions: use 'should' to express advice, remove extraneous words ('to', duplicate 'like'), use 'such as' to introduce examples, and complete the sentence.