Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify meaning and use correct words and simple sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you had opportunities, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g. "take a party", "pregnant pennists").

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, at primary school I joined the drama club and later, in high school, I participated in the school choir. These activities helped me build confidence and make friends.

제안: Give a direct opinion and support it with clear reasons and one brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and choose appropriate vocabulary (e.g. "beneficial", "develop skills"). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them develop new skills and discover interests. For example, learning a musical instrument or a sport can improve discipline and confidence.

× Yeah, I think I have a lot of opportunities to take a party in my In your activity I was a child like a pregnant pennists because of high school high school.

✓ Yes, I think I had a lot of opportunities to take part in extracurricular activities when I was a child and in high school.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'take a party' should be 'take part' (verb phrase misuse -> Grammar problem type ID 26), wrong tense 'have' should be past 'had' to match the question about childhood (present vs past -> ID 6 vs 5; primary is sentence structure so ID 26), and unclear nouns 'In your activity' and 'pregnant pennists' are nonsensical and likely mispronunciations; they were replaced with 'extracurricular activities' and 'in high school' to make meaning. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the time frame (use past for childhood), use the correct collocation 'take part in', and choose clear nouns to express the activities.

× I think people should be trying many deeper things because they're developable they're mad and This happened way to the pro to the sound.

✓ I think people should try many different things because they help people develop and gain experience.

The original has several structural and word choice errors: 'should be trying' is an unnecessary progressive form here; use modal + base verb 'should try' (modal verb usage -> ID 4 but overall sentence structure error -> ID 26). 'Many deeper things' is awkward; 'many different things' is natural. Phrases 'they're developable they're mad' and 'This happened way to the pro to the sound' are incoherent; they were interpreted as meaning 'help people develop and gain experience.' Suggestion: use 'should try' + base verb, choose natural adjectives like 'different', and express the reason clearly and simply.