Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류와 불완전한 표현이 있습니다. 먼저 간단하고 명확한 주제문으로 시작하세요(예: "Yes, I did." 또는 "Yes, I had several opportunities."). 그 다음 구체적인 활동을 하나 또는 두 개 예로 들고, 시제와 문법을 일관성 있게 사용하세요. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 사용해 이유나 배경을 덧붙이되 간결하게 구성하세요. 마지막으로 어색한 단어 선택(예: "academy so")을 피하고 정확한 명사("sports club" 또는 "running club")를 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often joined a running club at school because I enjoyed sprinting. For example, I trained there twice a week and took part in local races, which helped me stay fit and confident.

제안: 의미는 전달되지만 문법적으로 더 자연스럽고 구체적인 이유와 예시가 필요합니다. 주제문으로 시작한 뒤, 연결어(because, for example, which)로 이유를 말하고 구체적이고 현실적인 예를 하나 제시하세요. 또한 문장에서 관사와 어형변화에 주의하세요(예: "an opportunity" 대신 "an opportunity" 사용, 또는 "develop themselves" 대신 "develop personally"). 문장을 2~3문장으로 구성해 명확성을 높이세요.

예시: Yes, I think so because trying different activities gives people an opportunity to learn new skills and discover their interests. For example, someone who tries painting and volunteering might realise they prefer creative work or helping others, which can guide their future choices.

× Yes, I was. Uh. Running fast, so I take part in running. Academy so.

✓ Yes. I used to run a lot, so I took part in running at an academy.

The original has fragmented clauses and tense inconsistency. 'Yes, I was' is incomplete; use 'Yes' or 'Yes, I did.' 'Running fast, so I take part in running' mixes -ing form and present tense incorrectly. Use a past habit expression 'used to run' or past tense 'I ran' and match 'took part in running'. 'Academy so' is ungrammatical; specify 'at an academy.' Suggestion: organize into a complete sentence, keep past tense for childhood activities, and use correct preposition 'at'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I think because trying many different things is opportunity to develop themselves.

✓ Yes, I think trying many different things is an opportunity to develop oneself.

Errors: missing article 'an' before 'opportunity', incorrect reflexive pronoun 'themselves' for the general subject, and awkward word order. Use 'oneself' for a generic person or rephrase to 'people' and 'themselves'. Also maintain present tense but correct noun phrase 'is an opportunity'. Suggestion: say 'trying many different things is an opportunity to develop oneself' or 'gives people opportunities to develop themselves.' Grammar problem type ID:6