Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise: correct word choice (e.g., 'exchange' or 'extracurricular' instead of 'Extraint', 'hostile' → 'host') and avoid small grammatical issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep responses under five sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'immersive experience', 'homestays').

예시: Yes. When I was ten I went abroad on a short exchange program with my classmates. We stayed with host families and attended local school lessons for a week, which was an immersive experience that improved my confidence and language skills.

제안: Make the answer more concise and natural, fix minor errors ('a part‑time job' instead of 'apart job'), and add a linking word to connect reason and example. Use one clear topic sentence, one reason with linking phrase, and a specific example to illustrate the point.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because it helps them develop new skills and adaptability. For instance, taking a part‑time job or learning a foreign language can broaden your horizons and improve your problem‑solving and communication abilities.

× When I was ten, I remember I had the opportunity to go abroad with my classmates for short Extraint program.

✓ When I was ten, I remember I had the opportunity to go abroad with my classmates for a short exchange program.

The sentence misses the indefinite article 'a' before 'short exchange program' and contains a likely word choice error 'Extraint' which should be 'exchange'. Use 'a' before singular countable nouns beginning with a consonant sound. Also correct the noun to the intended word to convey meaning clearly.

× At the time we stayed with hostile families and attended local classes for a week.

✓ At the time we stayed with host families and attended local classes for a week.

The adjective 'hostile' means unfriendly and is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'host' (as in 'host families'). Using the wrong adjective changes the meaning. Replace 'hostile' with 'host' to indicate families who hosted the students.

× For example, taking up apart job or learning a new language can broaden their horizons and make them more adaptable in the future

✓ For example, taking up a part-time job or learning a new language can broaden their horizons and make them more adaptable in the future.

There are two issues: 'apart job' is incorrect and should be 'a part-time job' (needs article 'a' and hyphenated adjective 'part-time'), and the sentence ends without a period. Ensure correct noun phrase structure: 'taking up a part-time job' uses the gerund 'taking' followed by a correct noun phrase.