Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and contains useful detail, but several language errors and some awkward phrasing reduce clarity. Improve accuracy and fluency by correcting grammar (e.g., 'aboard' → 'abroad', 'host of families' → 'host families', 'attending' → 'attended') and tightening the response to two to three clear sentences. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'it was immersive and helpful' → specify how it helped).

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities. When I was ten I went abroad on a short exchange program with my classmates: we stayed with host families and attended local classes for a week, which was a highly immersive cultural experience that improved my language skills and understanding of daily life there.

제안: Good direct response with a clear opinion and a relevant example. To improve, vary vocabulary, correct minor awkward phrasing ('change your way to see problems' → 'change the way you see problems'), and add a linking word to illustrate cause and effect (e.g., 'because' already used—add 'for instance' or 'as a result'). Keep answers concise (2–3 sentences) and include a specific example from your experience for greater impact.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many things because it broadens horizons and builds practical skills. For instance, trying different hobbies like photography or volunteer work taught me problem-solving and helped me see challenges from new perspectives.

× When I was ten, I went aboard with my classmates on a short Exchange program where we stayed with host of families and attending local classes for a week, which was a great cultural experience because it was immersive and helpful.

✓ When I was ten, I went abroad with my classmates on a short exchange program where we stayed with host families and attended local classes for a week, which was a great cultural experience because it was immersive and helpful.

Multiple issues: 'aboard' is incorrect word choice; the correct word is 'abroad' (meaning in another country). 'Host of families' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'host families' (noun phrase). 'Attending' incorrectly creates a dangling participle and inconsistent verb tense; change to past tense 'attended' to match 'stayed' and 'went'. Also 'Exchange' should be lowercase 'exchange' as common noun. Suggestion: use parallel past tense verbs for actions that happened in the past and correct noun forms and word choice.

× ...we stayed with host of families...

✓ ...we stayed with host families...

The phrase 'host of families' is ungrammatical here. If you mean families hosting students, use the compound noun 'host families' without an article. 'Host of' can mean 'a lot of' but not followed by 'families' in this context. Suggestion: use 'host families' for families who host visitors.

× For example, taking up different hobbies or jobs can teach you practical abilities and change your way to see problems.

✓ For example, taking up different hobbies or jobs can teach you practical skills and change the way you see problems.

Word choice and phrasing: 'practical abilities' is less natural than 'practical skills'. 'Change your way to see problems' is ungrammatical; correct idiomatic expression is 'change the way you see problems' or 'change your perspective on problems'. Also maintain present tense modal construction 'can teach' with appropriate noun and preposition. Suggestion: use 'skills' and the idiom 'the way you see' or 'your perspective on' for clarity.