Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, concise phrasing and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb tenses (use past tense for childhood), possessive nouns (my mum/mom), and subject references (my mum, not my man). Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas, and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes. I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined a dance club and a gymnastics team, and I also played volleyball at school. My mum encouraged me to try different things because they helped me meet friends and learn useful skills.

제안: Avoid repeating personal childhood story as the main support; answer directly with a clear opinion and give general reasons and a specific example. Fix grammar (use ‘gymnastics’, ‘skills’, ‘helped me’), use linking words (for example, because, so) to structure your response, and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences to be natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it broadens their experiences and builds confidence. For example, joining clubs or trying new sports can help you meet people and improve social and practical skills. Therefore, experimenting with different activities is usually beneficial.

× Yes, I have plenty opportunities to try new activities.

✓ Yes, I have plenty of opportunities to try new activities.

The noun 'opportunities' is countable and requires plural form when used with 'plenty of'. The original omitted 'of' and used singular/plural incorrectly. Use 'plenty of opportunities' or 'many opportunities'. Suggestion: say 'I have plenty of opportunities' or 'I had many opportunities' depending on tense.

× My man keep encouraging me all the time to try new activities so I can meet new people and learn new skills.

✓ My mom kept encouraging me all the time to try new activities so I could meet new people and learn new skills.

Errors: 'man' likely intended 'mom' (word choice not listed but corrected), 'keep' is present tense while surrounding context is past, and 'can' should match past perspective 'could'. Use past tense 'kept' and past modal 'could'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense in narrative: 'My mom kept encouraging me... so I could...'.

× When I was a child, I joined several clubs and I used to do dance, do gymnasium and play volleyball.

✓ When I was a child, I joined several clubs and I used to dance, do gymnastics and play volleyball.

'Used to' should be followed by base verb 'dance' not noun phrase 'do dance'. 'Gymnasium' is a place; the activity is 'gymnastics'. Use 'do gymnastics' or simply 'practice gymnastics'. Suggestion: say 'I used to dance, do gymnastics and play volleyball.'

× My mom kept encouraging me to try new things so I could meet people and develop new skill.

✓ My mom kept encouraging me to try new things so I could meet people and develop new skills.

'Skill' should be plural 'skills' because multiple abilities are implied and 'new skills' is the natural collocation. Maintain past tense 'kept' and 'could' which is correct. Suggestion: use plural when referring to more than one ability: 'develop new skills'.

× And you need those clubs. Help me become more confident.

✓ Those clubs helped me become more confident.

The original two short sentences are mismatched in person and structure: 'And you need those clubs' is addressed to the listener and doesn't fit the narrative; 'Help me become more confident' is an imperative or fragment. To report past experience, use a single past-tense statement: 'Those clubs helped me become more confident.' Suggestion: keep tense and perspective consistent when describing past experiences.