Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn về thì (tense) và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ, sắp xếp ý theo cấu trúc rõ ràng (topic sentence + 1–2 câu hỗ trợ). Nên sửa lỗi động từ (participate -> participated), tên môn chính xác (Taekwondo), và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về những trải nghiệm (ví dụ: bao nhiêu tuổi, loại cuộc thi, cảm xúc cụ thể). Dùng liên từ như "and", "so", "which" để mạch lạc hơn nhưng không quá dài. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: When I was a child, I participated in Taekwondo and joined several local competitions. I started learning it at around age eight, and the training was both challenging and exciting. Because of this, I became more disciplined and confident. Competing taught me how to handle pressure and work with teammates.

제안: Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc hơn, tránh cấu trúc lúng túng và lỗi ngữ pháp; sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: trực tiếp trả lời (Yes/No) + lý do cụ thể + ví dụ/ hệ quả. Sửa cấu trúc như “if we don’t try, we may regret it later” và tránh từ không chính xác (depressed up thing). Thêm liên từ (because, so, therefore) để nối ý. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because trying new things helps them discover their interests and talents. If we avoid new experiences, we might regret missed opportunities later. For example, taking a short course or hobby class can lead to a lifelong passion or career change.

× So when I was younger I participate in martial arts and it was very interesting and does make me fascinated by doing Tekkondo and I also go to many competitions.

✓ So when I was younger I participated in martial arts; it was very interesting and made me fascinated with doing Taekwondo, and I also went to many competitions.

The sentence mixes past and present verbs incorrectly. Use past tense verbs (participated, made, went) because the action happened in the past. Also use 'fascinated with' or 'fascinated by' and correct the spelling of 'Taekwondo'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when describing childhood activities and split long run-on ideas into clearer clauses.

× Yes, I think people should try many different things that they desire because sometimes if we don't have time or don't have opportunity to do, we will feel regretted and we feel depressed up thing that we do in current.

✓ Yes, I think people should try many different things they desire because sometimes if we don't have the time or the opportunity to do them, we will feel regret and be depressed about the things we are doing now.

Errors include incorrect article use before 'time' and 'opportunity', missing object pronoun ('them') after 'do', wrong adjective/verb form 'regretted' should be the noun 'regret' or verb 'regret', and awkward phrase 'depressed up thing that we do in current.' Use 'be depressed about the things we are doing now' for clarity. Suggestion: add articles where needed, include object pronouns for antecedents, and choose correct word forms (regret as noun or 'feel regret').

× ...it was very interesting and does make me fascinated by doing Tekkondo...

✓ ...it was very interesting and made me fascinated with doing Taekwondo...

The auxiliary 'does' is inappropriate with past description; use past 'made'. Also 'fascinated' is an adjective that takes 'with' or 'by' plus a noun; 'fascinated with doing' is more natural. Correct spelling 'Taekwondo'. Suggestion: match tense and use correct preposition with 'fascinated'.

× ...don't have opportunity to do...

✓ ...don't have the opportunity to do them...

Countable noun 'opportunity' needs an article ('the' or 'an') and the verb 'do' refers to 'things' so include the object pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: use 'the opportunity' or 'an opportunity' and add 'them' to avoid ambiguity.

× ...we will feel regretted and we feel depressed up thing that we do in current.

✓ ...we will feel regret and be depressed about the things we are doing now.

Original is ungrammatical: 'feel regretted' mixes active and passive forms, 'depressed up thing' is incorrect phrase, and 'in current' is wrong. Rephrase to 'feel regret' and 'be depressed about the things we are doing now' for correct structure and meaning. Suggestion: simplify and use common collocations: 'feel regret' and 'be depressed about'.