Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and tense errors, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about an activity or a memory using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For instance, I played team sports like football and also learned badminton at school. Because I enjoyed them, I kept practising every weekend and improved a lot over the years.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with a specific reason and an example, using linking words (e.g., because, for example, therefore). Avoid redundant phrases like “in my opinion” and “I feel like” together. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover their strengths and interests. For example, by trying music and sports I found that I prefer team activities, so I joined a local club and made new friends.

× I had so many opportunity to take part in new activities as a child.

✓ I had so many opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

The noun 'opportunity' is countable and is used with 'many', which requires the plural form 'opportunities'. Suggestion: use 'opportunities' when quantifying with 'many'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× I used to go for sports for forever.

✓ I used to play sports forever.

The original uses the preposition 'for' incorrectly with 'go for sports'. In English, we usually say 'play sports' or 'go to sports practice'. Also 'for forever' is informal and awkward; 'forever' can remain but 'played sports for as long as I can remember' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'play sports' or 'go to' with correct prepositions and rephrase 'for forever' to 'for as long as I can remember'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× For example, it's football or badminton and many other sports.

✓ For example, football, badminton, and many other sports.

Using 'it's' is incorrect here because you are listing examples, not identifying one thing. The sentence should list the sports directly. Also add commas and the conjunction 'and' before the final item in the list. Suggestion: list items without 'it's' and use proper punctuation for lists. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× people should try different things as they can because when you start trying new things, you will learn many more things.

✓ people should try as many different things as they can because when you start trying new things, you will learn many new things.

The phrase 'try different things as they can' is missing 'as many' to correctly express the extent; use the modal 'should' with the comparative structure 'as many...as'. Also 'many more things' is comparative without context; 'many new things' or 'a lot of new things' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'try as many different things as they can' and replace 'many more things' with 'many new things'. Grammar problem type ID: 4