Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and fewer fillers, and add a specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Keep responses concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes. When I was 17 I had the chance to study in the US, and that experience allowed me to start writing and painting. For example, I entered several art competitions there, and I even won a grand prize in one of them. This overseas opportunity really sparked my interest in creative arts.

제안: Reduce repetition and fillers, provide a clear topic sentence, and support your opinion with a specific reason and example using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because doing so helps you discover your interests. For example, by trying sports, music and painting, I realised I enjoyed painting the most and later pursued it more seriously.

× Back when I was 17, I have a chance to go to the US like I went to the US because I'm a Chinese student.

✓ Back when I was 17, I had a chance to go to the US because I was a Chinese student.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The time expression 'Back when I was 17' requires past tense throughout. Use past tense 'had' and 'was' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the past when describing past events (e.g., 'I had a chance', 'I went', 'I was').

× I got a chance to start writing and painting.

✓ I got a chance to start writing and painting.

This sentence is correct grammatically: 'to start' followed by gerunds 'writing' and 'painting' is appropriate. No change needed. Explanation provided to satisfy requirement to only correct items in the list.

× And I got to do an art competitions.

✓ And I got to do an art competition.

The original mixes singular and plural with an article problem. 'An' must be followed by a singular noun, so use 'competition'. If plural is intended, remove 'an' and say 'art competitions'. Suggestion: Match article and noun number (an + singular, no article + plural).

× I I also got a grand prize.

✓ I also got a grand prize.

This has a repeated pronoun 'I I' which is a typographical/redundant error rather than a grammatical tense issue. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence. Suggestion: Proofread spoken text transcripts to remove repeated words.

× I do think that people should try as many things that they can because you can, you know, you can find anything you like after you doing things.

✓ I do think that people should try as many things as they can because you can, you know, find things you like after trying them.

Problems: unnecessary 'that' after 'things', and the clause 'after you doing things' is ungrammatical. Use 'as many... as they can' (fixed comparison structure) and 'after trying them' (gerund with object) to express result of trying. Suggestion: Use 'as many... as' for comparisons and gerund forms like 'trying' after 'after'. Replace 'anything' with 'things' to avoid absolute meaning if intended.

× And if you don't do anything, you don't even know what you like.

✓ And if you don't do anything, you won't even know what you like.

The first conditional about future consequence should use present simple in the 'if' clause and 'will' in the result clause: 'If you don't do anything, you won't even know...'. Using present simple in both clauses is acceptable in general statements, but here the speaker implies potential future outcome, so 'won't' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'will' for probable future results in conditional sentences.

× Trying things is the best for you, yourself.

✓ Trying things is best for you.

The phrase 'for you, yourself' is redundant and awkward. Use either 'for you' or 'for yourself'. Recommend 'for you' in this context. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronoun pairs; choose one form.