Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use past tense consistently; provide a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your sentence. Aim for 3–4 sentences total. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., participated, gained experience, certificates).

예시: Yes. I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my primary school teacher encouraged me to participate in basketball tournaments and writing contests, and as a result I gained confidence and several certificates. These experiences helped me develop teamwork and writing skills.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your position, then add two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., ‘focus’ used twice) and finish the thought. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., concentrate, specialize, spread oneself too thin). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think people should try everything; it's better to concentrate on a few areas. Focusing allows someone to develop deeper skills and achieve better results, and otherwise they may spread themselves too thin. However, trying a few different things early on can help people discover what they enjoy most.

× Yes, I do have lots of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had lots of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

The question asks about past experiences ('Did you have...?'), so the student's reply should use past tense. Using present tense 'do have' is inconsistent. Change to 'had' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past experiences (I had, I participated).

× In primary school my teacher often offers me a lot of opportunities for example, take part in basketball competitions or some writing competitions, which at the end I gained a lot of experience and a lot of certifications which allows me

✓ In primary school my teacher often offered me many opportunities, for example to take part in basketball competitions or writing competitions, and in the end I gained a lot of experience and many certificates which allowed me to...

Multiple issues apply but per instructions we only correct those matching the list. The sentence uses incorrect verb forms for past actions: 'offers' should be past 'offered' because it refers to primary school (past). Also 'which allows me' must match past 'allowed me'. These are third-person singular and tense agreement issues; here 'offers' is present third-person singular but context requires past. Use 'offered' and 'allowed'. Additional improvements: use 'many' with countable 'certificates' and 'to take part' after 'for example'.

× I do not believe that people should try as many things as they can because I think people should focus on one specific thing that they should like focus on and they can improve on that specific thing because if people try a lot of different things they may be

✓ I do not believe that people should try as many things as they can because I think people should focus on one specific thing and improve on it, because if people try a lot of different things they may be...

The sentence is overly repetitive and mixes phrasing. The tense 'do not believe' is fine, but parts like 'that they should like focus on and they can improve on that specific thing' are ungrammatical and awkward. This correction simplifies structure: remove redundant modal 'should' and 'like', use infinitive 'to improve' or 'and improve on it'. The ending 'they may be' is incomplete; it needs continuation (e.g., 'they may be less successful'). Suggestion: avoid repetition and keep parallel structure (focus on X and improve on it).