Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発言は内容が伝わりますが、文法と語順、語彙の選択に改善が必要です。まず主語と動詞の一致や冠詞の使い方を直し、冗長な表現や不自然な語順を避けましょう。また、トピック文（主な答え）を明確にし、その後に理由や具体的な例を短く付け加えると良いです。接続詞（for example, as a result, so）を使って文をつなげ、詳細を具体化してください。例：I joined the school track and field team and served as captain. As captain, I learned how challenging leadership can be, for example by organizing practice schedules and motivating teammates.

예시: Yes. I joined my high school track and field team and served as the captain. As captain, I learned how challenging leadership can be because I had to organize practice schedules, coordinate team members, and encourage those who were struggling. These responsibilities helped me develop communication and planning skills.

제안: 答えの方向性は良いですが、言い換えやつなぎ表現を使って論理を明確にし、口癖や曖昧な語（uh, weak）を避けましょう。まず簡潔なトピック文を述べ、続けて理由を2点ほど具体例で補強します。語彙は文脈に合う単語（e.g. inexperienced, unsureではなく inexperiencedの方が自然）を選び、接続詞（because, therefore, for instance）で流れを作ってください。例：Yes, people should try different activities because it helps them gain experience and discover interests; for instance, taking a cooking class might reveal a passion for food.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them gain experience and discover new interests. For example, trying a music class or volunteering can teach practical skills and boost confidence. As a result, people become more adaptable and better prepared for challenges.

× I joined track on the field club and was responsible for team captain.

✓ I joined the track and field club and was the team captain.

The noun phrase 'track on the field club' is incorrect; the correct name is 'track and field club' (singular club). 'Was responsible for team captain' is ungrammatical; use 'was the team captain' to indicate the role. Suggestion: Use fixed collocations ('track and field club') and replace 'responsible for' + role with 'was' + role when stating a position.

× As a team captain I it is good opportunity to learn how leadership difficult is.

✓ As a team captain, it was a good opportunity to learn how difficult leadership is.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: extraneous pronoun 'I', wrong word order, and incorrect clause construction. Place 'it was a good opportunity' and then an infinitive or a clause 'to learn how difficult leadership is'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary pronouns, use correct word order, and ensure adjective 'difficult' modifies 'leadership'.

× Yes, it is important for us to do such a challenging, uh, issues.

✓ Yes, it is important for us to do such challenging things.

'Challenging' should modify a plural noun like 'things' or 'activities', not 'issues'. The original mixes singular/plural and wrong noun choice. Also avoid filler 'uh' in written responses. Suggestion: Use 'challenging things' or 'challenging activities' to match the adjective and plural noun.

× Uh, since we are weak so we should try different things to acquire knowledge and skills.

✓ Since we are inexperienced, we should try different things to acquire knowledge and skills.

'Weak' is vague and not appropriate here; 'inexperienced' fits the intended meaning. Also remove redundant conjunction 'so' after 'since'. Suggestion: Choose precise adjectives ('inexperienced') and avoid redundant connectors (use either 'since' or 'so', not both).