Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并保持句子简洁明了。先给出主题句说明是否有机会，然后用1–2句具体细节支持（比如具体活动、你的角色、感受和结果），避免不清晰或语法错误的表述。此外注意逻辑衔接词（for example, because, so）和时态一致性。最后将情感描写具体化（为什么感到温暖、紧张）。

예시: Yes. I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child, such as taking part in school sports meets and leading a small team of classmates. For example, I captained a relay team, which made me feel proud and a little nervous because I didn’t want to let my teammates down.

제안: 表达要完整并用连贯的逻辑展开。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后用1–2个清楚的原因或例子支持观点，使用连接词（for example, because, therefore）。避免重复短语和句子未完的情况，注意语法（不要混用‘I’和‘As I know’）。

예시: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover new interests and skills. For example, attending a camp where you try sports, arts, and teamwork can broaden your horizons and build confidence.

× I raised other students and I felt warm.

✓ I helped other students and felt warm.

句子中使用的动词“raised”意思是“抚养、养育”，与句子语境不符。原意应为“帮助其他学生”，应使用“helped”。另外，两个并列的谓语可以省略第二个主语“I”。建议用过去式“helped”来与前文“I had”保持时态一致。

× I was excited and nervous because I'm afraid of losing.

✓ I was excited and nervous because I was afraid of losing.

句子整体在描述过去的经历，主句使用过去时“was”，却在原因从句中用了现在时“I'm”，时态不一致。应将从句也改为过去时“I was”以保持时态一致。

× In my opinion, I would like to say yes.

✓ In my opinion, yes.

该句冗余且结构不自然。短回答可直接说“In my opinion, yes.”或“I would say yes.” 两者都能清晰表达观点，避免重复表达“in my opinion”和“would like to say”。

× They should try different things at the camp.

✓ They should try different things.

句子中加上“at the camp”限定了场景，但上下文并未提到营地，且问题是关于人们是否应尽可能多尝试不同事物，更自然的回答不需要限定地点。建议删去多余的地点短语以使表达更通用。

× And because I As I know, trying different things can broaden our horizons and let us know

✓ As far as I know, trying different things can broaden our horizons and let us know more.

原句有重复词“because I As I know”且逻辑连接混乱。常用的固定表达是“As far as I know”表示“据我所知”。另外句子未完成，末尾缺少宾语，补上“more”或具体内容（例如“more about ourselves”）使句子完整。