Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và chia động từ; dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và liên kết logic. Ví dụ, sửa lỗi thì và số nhiều (hear → had, opportunity → opportunities), chia động từ (encourage → encouraged), và thêm thông tin cụ thể về những hoạt động để câu có nội dung rõ ràng hơn. Hạn chế dài dòng không cần thiết, giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. My parents encouraged me to join the school drama club and the local football team, which helped me develop confidence and teamwork skills. For example, performing in a school play taught me how to speak clearly in front of others.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và kết cấu câu; tránh từ nối không phù hợp (Yet không phù hợp ở đầu câu), chia động từ đúng (help → helps) và bỏ cụm thừa (is also make → also makes). Thêm liên kết logic (for example, therefore) và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để minh hoạ quan điểm. Giữ không quá 4 câu.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things. Trying new activities helps people discover hidden talents and improve their physical and mental health; for example, learning to paint can reduce stress and boost creativity. Therefore, exploring a variety of experiences makes life more fulfilling and less monotonous.

× As a child, I hear several opportunity to engage in new activity.

✓ As a child, I heard several opportunities to engage in new activities.

The sentence uses present tense 'hear' but refers to past time 'As a child', so use past tense 'heard' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'several' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to reflect multiple types. Suggested improvement: use consistent past tense and match noun number to quantifiers.

× My parents encourage me to join different club and sports which allow me to explore various interests and develop new skills outside of school.

✓ My parents encouraged me to join different clubs and sports, which allowed me to explore various interests and develop new skills outside of school.

The clause refers to past events, so verbs should be in the past tense 'encouraged' and 'allowed' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Club' must be plural 'clubs' to agree with 'different' and 'sports' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also add a comma before the relative clause for clarity. Suggested improvement: maintain past tense throughout and ensure nouns agree in number with modifiers.

× Yet people should try as many different things as they can.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can.

Using 'Yet' at the sentence start is unsuitable here; 'Yet' implies contrast and is unnatural in this affirmative response. Replace with 'Yes' or omit the connector (Grammar Problem Type 16). Suggested improvement: choose connectors that match the intended meaning and register.

× Exploring different experiences help in discovering health and talent, and fostering emotional growth is also make life more interesting and less prone to monotony.

✓ Exploring different experiences helps in discovering strengths and talents, and fostering emotional growth also makes life more interesting and less prone to monotony.

The gerund subject 'Exploring' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' not 'help' (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Health and talent' is awkward; 'strengths and talents' or 'interests and talents' is clearer. In the second clause, 'is also make' is incorrect: use 'also makes' to agree with the singular subject 'fostering emotional growth' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 27). Suggested improvement: ensure subject-verb agreement with gerund subjects and use parallel structure for coordinated ideas.