Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence completeness and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and complete thoughts. Add one or two concise specific details using linking words to make your answer natural and informative.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my mother encouraged me. For example, I attended a dance club at the local swimming centre and I also took English lessons twice a week. These experiences helped me become more confident and taught me discipline.

제안: Make your opinion clear with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words, and finish with a short example or outcome. Use complete sentences and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it promotes learning and personal growth. For instance, trying new hobbies can teach practical skills and reveal interests you did not know you had, which can lead to better career or leisure choices.

× Yes, I have pretty much opportunities to take part when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had quite a few opportunities to take part when I was a child.

The student used 'have' (present) with 'when I was a child' (past) and 'pretty much opportunities' which is ungrammatical: 'opportunities' is plural but the quantifier 'pretty much' is colloquial and followed by uncountable or plural nouns; better is 'quite a few opportunities'. Correct tense: 'had' to match past time reference. Suggestion: use 'had' for past and 'quite a few' to modify plural countable nouns.

× I used to go to swimming pool for a dance club there and I also study English when I

✓ I used to go to the swimming pool for a dance club there, and I also studied English then.

Mixed tenses: 'used to' indicates past habitual action so the coordinated clause should be past as well: 'studied' not 'study'. Also article 'the' is required before 'swimming pool'. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'then' or finishing the clause makes it grammatical. Suggestion: keep past tense consistency and include necessary articles.

× Yes, I think that people should try as many as they can.

✓ Yes, I think that people should try as many things as they can.

The phrase 'as many' requires a countable noun to follow (e.g., 'things'). Omitting the noun makes the sentence incomplete. Suggestion: include the noun 'things' to complete the comparative expression.

× The main reason is that it helps them learn and grow the main thing you can try something new and pick up

✓ The main reason is that it helps them learn and grow; most importantly, you can try something new and pick up new skills.

Run-on and unclear structure: two ideas were joined without proper punctuation or connectors. Also 'the main thing you can try something new and pick up' is ungrammatical. I rephrased to two coherent clauses and added 'new skills' to complete 'pick up'. Suggestion: separate ideas with a semicolon or a full stop and explicitly state what can be 'picked up'.