Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tense and sentence structure, avoid repetition, and be concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with connecting words. For example, use past tense consistently (e.g., 'I often had the opportunity…'), replace vague phrases like 'tour wheel' with correct words (e.g., 'community centre' or 'classes'), and name activities correctly ('badminton'). Keep responses within 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

예시: I often had opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents enrolled me in community classes. For example, I took dancing and singing lessons, and I also learned sports like ping-pong and badminton. These experiences helped me discover what I enjoyed and build confidence.

제안: Reduce repetition and organize ideas: state your opinion clearly, then give one or two specific reasons linked with connectors (because, for example, therefore). Correct grammar (use modal 'should' and present tense) and simplify phrasing ('be curious about things they have never tried'). Add a concrete example to make your point more convincing and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, trying outdoor activities like hiking or kayaking can improve fitness and confidence, and it might lead to a lasting hobby.

× Yes, I always have opportunity to try the new things because my parents use because I have so many free time and my parents used send me to the tour wheel to learn about the new things such as dancing, singing and also ping pong or badmington.

✓ Yes, I always had the opportunity to try new things because my parents used to send me to the local community center to learn new activities such as dancing, singing, and also ping-pong or badminton.

Multiple tense and verb-form errors: The question asks about childhood, so past tense is required (change 'have' to 'had'). Article and countability: 'have opportunity' -> 'had the opportunity'. Redundant 'because' removed. 'I have so many free time' -> 'I had so much free time' (uncountable noun 'time' with 'much'). 'Used send me' is incorrect; use 'used to send me' to indicate past habitual action. 'tour wheel' is likely a wrong phrase; 'local community center' is a clearer, idiomatic replacement. 'new things' repeated; streamline to 'new activities'. 'ping pong or badmington' corrected to 'ping-pong or badminton'. Suggestions: Use past tense consistently for past experiences, include articles appropriately (the opportunity), use 'used to' for habitual past actions, use uncountable quantifiers with 'time' (much), and choose correct vocabulary for activities.

× Yes, I think so. I think people should try as many different things as they can because this is the chance for them to explore their own interests and try like be curious about the thing that have been have never tried it before, especially like outdoor activity.

✓ Yes, I think so. I think people should try as many different things as they can because it is a chance for them to explore their own interests and be curious about things they have never tried before, especially outdoor activities.

Several issues: 'this is the chance' -> 'it is a chance' for natural phrasing. Remove redundant 'try like be curious' and use 'be curious about things' as correct verb phrase. Tense and agreement: 'the thing that have been have never tried it before' is ungrammatical; correct to 'things they have never tried before' (use plural 'things', pronoun 'they', present perfect 'have never tried' is appropriate). 'especially like outdoor activity' -> 'especially outdoor activities' (plural and remove filler 'like'). Suggestions: Keep modal 'should' as it correctly expresses advice, but ensure surrounding clauses are grammatical: use concise structures, correct pronouns, and present perfect for experiences up to now.