Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (tense, subject-verb agreement, articles) and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: When I was a child, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities because my school didn’t offer clubs or extracurricular programs. As a result, most of my time was spent studying at home and helping my family. However, I still managed to pick up simple hobbies like playing football and learning the piano, which I practiced at weekends.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy (articles, plural/singular, verb forms) and use clear linking words to organize reasons and example. Be specific about what kinds of activities and the benefits, and avoid unclear words (e.g., 'boardwalk'). Keep answer concise (2–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover interests and develop practical skills. For example, trying part-time work or different hobbies can reveal hidden talents and improve responsibility and problem-solving in everyday life.

× When I was a child, I don't have many opportunity to try a new activities because of my school don't offer club or exclaimer programs.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have many opportunities to try new activities because my school didn't offer club or extracurricular programs.

Tense consistency: the sentence describes the past but uses present tense 'don't have' and 'don't offer'; change to past 'didn't have' and 'didn't offer'. Singular/plural: 'many opportunity' should be plural 'many opportunities'. Article and word choice: 'a new activities' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'new activities'. 'exclaimer programs' is incorrect word; use 'extracurricular programs'. Also remove unnecessary 'because of' and use 'because' for clarity. Suggestions: keep past tense throughout, match singular/plural, and use correct vocabulary for school programs.

× Most of my time was spent studying at home and helping my family so I could take up hobbies like sport or music.

✓ Most of my time was spent studying at home and helping my family, so I couldn't take up hobbies like sports or music.

Logical tense/modal issue and singular/plural: The original 'so I could take up hobbies' contradicts the context that time was spent studying; use 'couldn't' to express inability. 'sport' should be plural 'sports' when referring to hobbies in general. Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Suggestion: ensure meaning matches context and use plural for general activities.

× Yes, people should try many different things as possible because it help them discover a new interest and develop useful skill.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover new interests and develop useful skills.

Word order and missing words: 'as possible' should be preceded by 'as' -> 'as many different things as possible'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it help' should be 'it helps' if 'it' referred to a singular subject, but here 'trying many things' is better referred to with plural 'helps them', so use 'helps'. Singular/plural: 'a new interest' and 'useful skill' should be plural 'new interests' and 'useful skills' to match general meaning. Suggestion: use correct comparative phrase, ensure subject-verb agreement, and pluralize general nouns.

× For example, experimenting with different hobbies or part-time jobs can uncover hidden talent and make you more dependable and capable in boardwalk and everyday life.

✓ For example, experimenting with different hobbies or part-time jobs can uncover hidden talents and make you more dependable and capable in both work and everyday life.

Count noun pluralization: 'hidden talent' should be 'hidden talents' when speaking generally. Word choice/preposition: 'boardwalk' is incorrect in context; likely intended 'work' or 'the workplace'. Use 'work' and add 'both' to pair with 'everyday life'. Also ensure parallel structure: 'make you more dependable and capable in both work and everyday life.' Suggestion: use correct plural forms, choose appropriate vocabulary for context, and maintain parallel structure.