Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you often feel tired?
수험생
Yes, I often feel tired. Umm, actually I think I might. And I'm not an energetic uh, guy because uh, well, after sporting and studying I always felt hard so I always need to take a break uh, umm, usually for an one hour.
시험관
When would you feel tired?
수험생
Very often I think for example when I finish finish my work or when I turn working over time or just look back home. I always feel tired
시험관
What do you do when you feel tired?
수험생
sleep it must be sleep because when I'm exhausted I think sleep could make me more energetic and refreshing and besides I always have a great meal to make me relaxed and
시험관
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
수험생
Actually, it depends on whether the friend is my intimate friend because if it's my intimate friend I could tell her old hair that I'm so tired so I want to rest, but if not I think I need to follow our appointment
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you often feel tired?
점수: 52.0제안: 先直接回答后补充原因，避免重复表达“I often feel tired”和“I think I might”。“after sporting”可改为“after exercising”，“felt hard”不能表达疲惫，可用“feel exhausted”或“feel worn out”；“an one hour”应为“an hour”。减少填充词，并将原因和休息时间连贯地说出来。
예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after exercising or studying for a long time. I’m not a very energetic person, so I usually take a one-hour break to recharge.
When would you feel tired?
점수: 36.0제안: 回答中提到了工作，但“turn working over time”和“look back home”意思不清楚。可以具体说明是在下班后、加班后，或回家路上感到疲惫。删去重复的“finish”，并用“for example”和“especially”组织细节，避免只重复说自己总是累。
예시: I usually feel tired after a long day at work, especially if I have to work overtime. By the time I get home, I’m often ready to relax.
What do you do when you feel tired?
점수: 49.0제안: 开头可以直接说“I usually take a nap or go to bed early”，不必重复强调“sleep”。“make me more energetic and refreshing”中，人的状态应说“make me feel refreshed”；“a great meal”较笼统，可说明吃什么或它如何帮助你放松。注意结束完整句子，控制在两到三句。
예시: I usually take a short nap because it helps me feel refreshed. If I’m still tired later, I’ll have a proper meal and take it easy for the rest of the evening.
When you feel tired, do you still go out with your friends?
점수: 43.0제안: 回答的基本思路清楚：是否赴约取决于朋友关系，但“intimate friend”通常不用于表达亲密朋友，可用“close friend”；“tell her old hair”应是想说“坦白告诉她”，可用“tell her honestly”。“follow our appointment”不自然，可改为“keep the plan”或“keep our appointment”。说明即使对方不是亲密朋友，你仍会赴约的原因。
예시: It depends on how close I am to the friend. If it’s a close friend, I’ll tell them honestly that I’m tired and ask to reschedule. Otherwise, I’ll usually keep our plans because I don’t want to let them down.
문법
× After sporting and studying I always felt hard so I always need to take a break.
✓ After exercising and studying, I always feel tired, so I always need to take a break.
这里描述的是经常发生的习惯，应使用一般现在时。原句中的“felt”是过去式，与表示习惯的“always need”不一致，应改为“feel”。
× After sporting and studying I always felt hard.
✓ After exercising and studying, I always feel tired.
“hard”通常表示“坚硬的”或“努力地”，不适合描述人的疲倦状态。这里应使用“tired”（疲倦的）。
× Usually for an one hour.
✓ Usually for one hour.
“one”前面不能使用“an”。可以说“for one hour”；也可以说“for an hour”，但不能把“an”和“one”连用。
× When I turn working over time.
✓ When I work overtime.
表达“加班”时应使用“work overtime”。“turn”后接“working”不能表达这个意思；这里直接用动词原形“work”即可。
× Sleep could make me more energetic and refreshing.
✓ Sleep could make me more energetic and refreshed.
“refreshing”通常形容令人精神振奋的事物；描述睡眠后“我”的状态时，应使用“refreshed”（感到精神焕发的）。
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