Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 先直接回答，再说明具体原因。当前句子中“act on early to go to the world”和“It they made me”等表达不清楚，重复也较多。可以用“get up early”“study at night”和“exhausted”清楚地描述作息及结果，并控制在两三句内。

예시: Yes, I do. I often have to get up early for work, and then I study at night. As a result, I don’t get enough rest and feel exhausted.

제안: 回答时注意时态一致：描述经常发生的情况，应使用一般现在时，例如“I feel tired when...”。“I’m fresh in the fur”含义不清，可以改为“I'm new to the job”；“no one teach me”应改为“no one teaches me”。建议说明工作中的具体困难，以及它如何影响你的状态。

예시: I usually feel tired when I have difficulties at work. I’m still new to the job, and sometimes I’m not sure how to handle certain tasks. When my manager criticizes me without explaining how to improve, I feel stressed and discouraged.

제안: 内容比较具体，也给出了购物和运动的例子。需要删除重复的“which”，并注意动词形式：说“prefer swimming”或“prefer to swim”，不要说“prefer to swimming”。可以用连接词补充这些活动如何帮助你放松，并避免把“情绪”直译为“emotions”。

예시: When I feel tired, I do something to help me relax, such as exercising or shopping. I enjoy swimming and playing basketball because they help me clear my head. Sometimes I also buy a few clothes, which usually lifts my mood.

제안: 先明确回答“Yes, I do”，再解释和朋友交流的好处。当前句子有较多重复和语法错误：“my confused”应改为“what’s bothering me”或“my worries”；“some use advice”应改为“some useful advice”，因为“advice”是不可数名词。注意使用复数朋友时的代词一致性，并把句子拆分，让意思更清楚。

예시: Yes, I do. Talking to my friends helps me explain what’s bothering me, and they often give me useful advice. Spending time with them helps me relax and feel more positive.

× Yes, I do, because the work and study I often act on early to go to the world and afterward I often study knowledge at night.

✓ Yes, I do, because I often get up early for work and study, and then I study at night.

原句中“I often act on early to go to the world”的语序和结构不完整，导致句意难以理解。描述日常习惯时，可以用“I often get up early for work and study”表达“我常常早起工作和学习”，再用“and then”连接后续活动。

× It they made me, they made me so they made me so exhausted.

✓ This makes me feel exhausted.

原句重复了多个不完整、互相矛盾的片段，无法构成清楚的句子。可以用“This”指代前面提到的工作和学习安排，并用“makes me feel exhausted”完整表达“这让我感到疲惫”。

× I feel tired when I was troubled in work because I'm fresh in the fur and no one teach me what skills.

✓ I feel tired when I have trouble at work because I am new to the field and no one teaches me the skills I need.

这里是在说明通常什么时候会感到疲惫，因此应使用一般现在时。主句用了“I feel tired”，从句也应改为“I have trouble”，而不是过去时“was troubled”。描述经常发生的情况时，注意保持时态一致。

× I feel tired when I was troubled in work because I'm fresh in the fur and no one teach me what skills.

✓ I feel tired when I have trouble at work because I am new to the field and no one teaches me the skills I need.

表示“在工作中”时，通常说“at work”，而不说“in work”。建议把固定搭配作为整体记忆，例如“at work”（在工作中）和“new to the field”（刚进入这个领域）。

× I feel tired when I was troubled in work because I'm fresh in the fur and no one teach me what skills.

✓ I feel tired when I have trouble at work because I am new to the field and no one teaches me the skills I need.

“no one”表示单数，所以一般现在时的动词要加“-s”。因此应说“no one teaches”，而不是“no one teach”。可记住：主语是“he/she/it”或“no one”等单数形式时，一般现在时的动词通常加“-s”或“-es”。

× When I feel tired, I always do some activities which which change my emotions like shopping and do some exercise.

✓ When I feel tired, I always do activities such as shopping and exercising.

在“such as”后举例时，“shopping”和“exercising”都是动名词，形式保持一致。原句把“shopping”和“do some exercise”并列，结构不平行。列举活动时，建议统一使用动名词形式。

× For exercise I prefer to swimming and playing basketball.

✓ For exercise, I prefer swimming and playing basketball.

“prefer”后可以直接接动名词，如“prefer swimming”。原句中的“to swimming”结构不正确；并列的两个活动也应保持一致的动名词形式：“swimming and playing”。

× Shopping I will buy some clothes.

✓ When I go shopping, I buy some clothes.

这句话是在回答疲惫时通常会做什么，表达的是习惯，因此用一般现在时“buy”，而不是表示将来的“will buy”。描述经常发生的行为时，可使用一般现在时。

× Yes I do I because I can communicate with my friends about my confused and she will give me some use advice that is that makes me relax and leave my mood.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can talk to my friends about what is confusing me, and they give me useful advice that helps me relax and improves my mood.

“friends”是复数，后面不能用单数代词“she”指代，应使用“they”。代词的数要与它所指代的名词一致：复数名词用“they/their”，单数名词用“he/she/it”。

× Yes I do I because I can communicate with my friends about my confused and she will give me some use advice that is that makes me relax and leave my mood.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can talk to my friends about what is confusing me, and they give me useful advice that helps me relax and improves my mood.

“confused”通常用来描述人的感受，不能直接放在“my”后面作名词；可以改成“what is confusing me”。另外，“use”不能修饰“advice”，这里需要形容词“useful”，即“有用的建议”。使用名词或形容词时，要确认它们在句中的词性和功能。

× Yes I do I because I can communicate with my friends about my confused and she will give me some use advice that is that makes me relax and leave my mood.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can talk to my friends about what is confusing me, and they give me useful advice that helps me relax and improves my mood.

原句中“Yes I do I because”以及“that is that makes”包含重复和不完整的结构，句子连接不清楚。回答后直接用“because”说明原因，并用“and”连接朋友提供建议的结果，可以让句子结构更完整、清晰。