Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 「Yes, I often feel tired because...」と直接答えられており、理由も示せています。ただし、文法ミスが目立ちます。例えば、主語が複数でない場合は「everything makes me」、研究をする場所は通常「at university」または「at my university」とします。また、「learn so many things」はやや不自然なので、「deal with a heavy workload」や「study a wide range of subjects」のような自然な表現を使うとよいでしょう。大学院生として忙しい具体的な理由を一つに絞り、3文程度で簡潔に答えると、より効果的です。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m a graduate student. I have a heavy workload at university, and I also spend a lot of time conducting research. As a result, I’m usually exhausted by the end of the day.

제안: 「講義の後」という時間を直接答えていますが、「after so many lectures」より「after several lectures」または「after a long day of lectures」のほうが自然です。「I take a lecture」は誤りで、「I attend lectures」を使います。また、「I need to hear listen sorry, I need to hear English」のような言い直しは避け、「I have to concentrate on English throughout each lecture」と整理しましょう。疲れる理由を、英語を長時間集中して聞くこととして一文で明確に説明すると、流暢さと正確さが向上します。

예시: I usually feel tired after a long day of lectures. I study at a Hungarian university, and most of my classes are in English, so I have to concentrate very hard to follow them. That can be mentally exhausting.

제안: リラックスする方法を複数挙げており、質問には適切に答えています。ただし、「I took the bath」は時制と表現が不自然で、「I take a bath」または「I have a bath」とします。「go to the outside」は「go outside」、「see beautiful city」は「enjoy the beautiful city views」が自然です。また、現在の習慣について話しているため、動詞の時制を現在形に統一してください。「For example」や「If I have more energy」などのつなぎ表現を使うと、回答がより論理的になります。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually try to relax at home. For example, I take a bath, or I go to the gym for some light exercise. If I still have enough energy, I go outside and enjoy the beautiful city views.

제안: 「場合や気分による」という立場は示せていますが、「Depend on the case」は「It depends on the situation」、「it's dependent on my mood」は「It depends on my mood」とします。「mostly I rarely don't want to go」は否定が重なって意味が不明確なので、「I usually prefer to stay home」と言い換えましょう。友達と話したくないという内容ではなく、疲れているときは会話をする気力がないという理由を明確に述べるとよいです。友達が一人なら「my friend」、複数なら「my friends」とし、2〜3文で簡潔にまとめてください。

예시: It depends on my mood, but I usually prefer to stay home when I’m tired. I often don’t have enough energy to socialize or keep up a conversation. However, if I’m feeling only slightly tired, I might meet a close friend for a short coffee.

× Also I need to do my research in the universities and everything make me so busy and tired.

✓ Also, I need to do my research at the university, and everything makes me so busy and tired.

Everything is a singular indefinite pronoun, so it requires the singular verb makes, not make. The singular form university is appropriate when referring to the student’s one university.

× Yeah mostly after so many lectures I feel so tired Yeah because I go to the Hungarian university, I take a lecture in English.

✓ I mostly feel tired after so many lectures because I go to the Hungarian university and attend lectures in English.

The preposition after is correctly used before a period of time or event. However, attend lectures is the grammatically natural verb combination; take a lecture is not normally used in this meaning. The sentence also needs punctuation to separate its ideas.

× Yeah, I try to relax for example I took the bath, I go to the gym and exercise or I go to the outside to see beautiful city and this makes me relax.

✓ I try to relax. For example, I take a bath, go to the gym and exercise, or go outside to see the beautiful city. This makes me relax.

The answer describes usual actions, so the present tense take is needed instead of the past tense took. The original answer mixes past and present tense without referring to a specific past event.

× Yeah, I try to relax for example I took the bath, I go to the gym and exercise or I go to the outside to see beautiful city and this makes me relax.

✓ I try to relax. For example, I take a bath, go to the gym and exercise, or go outside to see the beautiful city. This makes me relax.

The expression is take a bath, not take the bath, because it refers to a general activity. Beautiful city needs the definite article the because the speaker is referring to a particular city.

× Yeah, I try to relax for example I took the bath, I go to the gym and exercise or I go to the outside to see beautiful city and this makes me relax.

✓ I try to relax. For example, I take a bath, go to the gym and exercise, or go outside to see the beautiful city. This makes me relax.

Go outside is the correct expression. The preposition to is not used before outside when outside functions as an adverb showing movement.

× Depend on the case.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The original sentence does not have a complete subject and does not use the correct verb form. Use the subject it and the third-person singular verb depends. The phrase depends on the situation is also the natural expression.

× Depend on the case.

✓ It depends on the situation.

When the subject is it in the present tense, the verb must take the third-person singular ending -s. Therefore, depend must become depends.

× I don't want to go outside with my friend when I feel tired because I need to talk with my friend a lot.

✓ I usually do not want to go out with my friends when I feel tired because I need to talk with them a lot.

The question asks about going out with friends in general, so the plural forms friends and them are more appropriate than the singular forms friend and my friend. The plural pronoun them agrees with friends.

× Yeah, it's dependent on my mood but mostly I rarely don't want to go outside with my friend when I feel tired because I need to talk with my friend a lot.

✓ It depends on my mood, but I rarely want to go out with my friends when I feel tired because I need to talk with them a lot.

The adverbs mostly and rarely are awkwardly placed together, and their combination creates an unclear meaning. Place rarely before the main verb want, and use a clear sentence structure.