Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答方向基本直接，也给出了上学和喝咖啡的细节，但存在较多语法和表达问题。应将“usually feeling”改为“usually feel”，“when I waking up”改为“when I wake up”，并避免不完整的“Also staying awake during the...”结构；“in the bed”应改为“in bed”，“the ’cause this very bored”也需要重新组织。建议使用“原因 + 结果”的结构，并用 because、so 等连接词使答案更连贯。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I have to wake up early for school. I usually feel sleepy in the morning and sometimes find it hard to stay focused in class. That’s why I often grab a coffee to help me concentrate.

제안: 答案提到了工作日和早起，但句子结构不完整，部分内容难以理解，例如“my brain hasn't turned on and locked”和“it's rainfall”。应直接回答具体时间，如“on weekday mornings”，然后说明原因和结果。注意使用完整句子，例如“I feel tired when I have to wake up early because I do not get enough sleep.”

예시: I usually feel tired on weekday mornings because I have to wake up early for school. My brain feels slow, and I sometimes feel dizzy if I didn’t sleep well the night before. I feel much better after breakfast and a cup of coffee.

제안: 答案直接回答了喝咖啡这一做法，也说明了目的，但语法和搭配需要改进。“Definitely immediately grab”应改为“I immediately grab”，“obtain the dopamine and the caffeine”不自然，日常口语中可说“get some caffeine”；“boost my efficiency and productivity of the work”应改为“improve my productivity”。建议增加一个具体结果，并使用 so that 或 because 连接。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee and take a short break. The caffeine helps me stay awake and improves my concentration. If I have enough time, I also take a quick walk to refresh my mind.

제안: 答案表达了即使疲惫也会赴约的态度，但没有清楚使用“Yes”或“No”直接回答，而且“take my responsibility to hang out”“get a consent”“keep a smooth conversation”都不符合自然英语表达。可以说“if I have already made plans, I usually still go out”以及“keep the conversation going”。建议加入让步关系，例如“Although I’m tired, ...”，并补充一个具体做法，如早点回家或告诉朋友自己很累。

예시: Yes, I usually still go out with my friends if we have already made plans. Although I may feel tired, I try to enjoy the conversation and spend time with them. However, I might leave earlier than usual and go home to get some rest.

× Definitely, I usually feeling tired when I waking up in the bed in the morning and I have to go to school.

✓ Definitely, I usually feel tired when I wake up in bed in the morning and have to go to school.

情态或助动词后才使用动词原形；这里 usually 表示经常发生的动作，所以应使用一般现在时 feel，而不是 feeling。注意：主语 I 后面也使用动词原形 wake。

× Definitely, I usually feeling tired when I waking up in the bed in the morning and I have to go to school.

✓ Definitely, I usually feel tired when I wake up in bed in the morning and have to go to school.

描述日常习惯时要使用一般现在时。主语是 I，因此使用 feel 和 wake，而不是 feeling 和 waking。

× Also staying awake during the 'cause this very bored so I usually grab a coffee to stay focused.

✓ Also, staying awake during class is very boring because I feel bored, so I usually grab coffee to stay focused.

原句中的 staying awake 只是动名词短语，后面缺少谓语动词。加入 is 后，句子才有完整的主语和谓语。

× Also staying awake during the 'cause this very bored so I usually grab a coffee to stay focused.

✓ Also, staying awake during class is very boring because I feel bored, so I usually grab coffee to stay focused.

原因应该使用完整的连词 because，不能使用不完整或不清楚的连接方式。so 用来引出结果，前面需要有完整的原因分句。

× Also staying awake during the 'cause this very bored so I usually grab a coffee to stay focused.

✓ Also, staying awake during class is very boring because I feel bored, so I usually grab coffee to stay focused.

boring 用来描述使人感到无聊的事物，例如 staying awake；bored 用来描述人的感受，因此应说 I feel bored，而不是把 bored 用来描述事情。

× Usually be the weekdays that I have to stay awake and very early morning so my brain hasn't turned on and locked and so it's rainfall and feeling dizzy.

✓ Usually, I feel tired on weekdays when I have to wake up very early, so my brain hasn't turned on yet and I feel dizzy.

原句的句子结构不完整，Usually 后面缺少明确的主语和谓语，而且多个分句连接混乱。可以使用 I feel tired on weekdays when...来清楚地表达时间和原因。

× Usually be the weekdays that I have to stay awake and very early morning so my brain hasn't turned on and locked and so it's rainfall and feeling dizzy.

✓ Usually, I feel tired on weekdays when I have to wake up very early, so my brain hasn't turned on yet and I feel dizzy.

描述平时在工作日感到疲倦的情况时，要使用一般现在时。主语 I 后面应使用 feel；表示“醒来”应使用 wake up，而不是 stay awake。

× Definitely immediately grab a coffee to obtain the dopamine and the caffeine so that can boost my efficiency and productivity of the work in the afternoon.

✓ Definitely, I immediately grab coffee to obtain dopamine and caffeine so that they can boost my work efficiency and productivity in the afternoon.

so that 后面的分句缺少主语。dopamine and caffeine 是两个事物，因此用复数代词 they，不能省略主语。

× Definitely immediately grab a coffee to obtain the dopamine and the caffeine so that can boost my efficiency and productivity of the work in the afternoon.

✓ Definitely, I immediately grab coffee to obtain dopamine and caffeine so that they can boost my work efficiency and productivity in the afternoon.

coffee、dopamine 和 caffeine 在这里表示一般概念，通常是不可数名词，不需要使用 a 或 the。只有在指特定的咖啡、特定的多巴胺或特定的咖啡因时，才可能使用定冠词 the。

× Definitely immediately grab a coffee to obtain the dopamine and the caffeine so that can boost my efficiency and productivity of the work in the afternoon.

✓ Definitely, I immediately grab coffee to obtain dopamine and caffeine so that they can boost my work efficiency and productivity in the afternoon.

productivity of the work 不是自然的英语表达。表达“工作效率和生产力”时，应使用 work efficiency and productivity。表示在下午时使用 in the afternoon。

× I should take my responsibility to hang out with them if we get a consent and confirm the date before, and I should try my best to keep a smooth conversation with them even when I'm tired.

✓ I should take responsibility for hanging out with them if we get consent and confirm the date beforehand, and I should try my best to keep the conversation smooth with them even when I'm tired.

consent 是不可数名词，不能使用 a consent，应说 get consent。不可数名词前通常不使用不定冠词 a。

× I should take my responsibility to hang out with them if we get a consent and confirm the date before, and I should try my best to keep a smooth conversation with them even when I'm tired.

✓ I should take responsibility for hanging out with them if we get consent and confirm the date beforehand, and I should try my best to keep the conversation smooth with them even when I'm tired.

before 单独放在句末不能自然地表达“提前”。表示“事先、提前”时，使用副词 beforehand，并将其放在 confirm the date 后面。