Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답했고 공부와 달리기를 이유로 제시해 기본 구조가 좋습니다. 다만 “because of my study”는 “because of my studies” 또는 “because I study a lot”이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 “lots of coffee”는 가능하지만, 피로를 해소하는 구체적인 상황이나 결과를 한 가지 덧붙이면 내용이 더 풍부해집니다. 두 문장으로 간결하게 답한 점은 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I spend a lot of time studying and running. When I’m exhausted, I usually have a cup of coffee, although I try not to drink too much because it can affect my sleep.

제안: 피곤한 때로 일찍 일어나거나 수면 시간이 짧을 때를 제시해 질문에 적절히 답했습니다. 그러나 “sometimes I sleep only five hours so it makes me sleepy”는 문장 연결이 다소 어색하므로 “If I only get five hours of sleep, I feel sleepy”처럼 조건문으로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. “get up early”와 “not get enough sleep”의 관계를 명확히 연결하고, 다음 날 집중력이 떨어진다는 결과를 추가하면 더 효과적입니다.

예시: I usually feel tired when I have to get up early. Also, if I get only five hours of sleep, I feel sleepy throughout the day and find it difficult to concentrate on my studies.

제안: 커피를 마신다는 핵심 내용은 전달되지만, “have a coffee name”은 의미가 불분명하고 “It is drink coffee”는 문법적으로 틀렸습니다. 아마 “take a coffee nap”을 말하려 했다면 정확한 표현을 사용해야 합니다. “go to bed bed”처럼 단어를 반복하지 말고, 행동을 자연스러운 순서로 연결하세요. 예를 들어 “I usually drink some water or coffee, and if I have time, I take a short nap”처럼 답하면 명확하고 자연스럽습니다.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee and take a short break. If I’m extremely tired and have enough time, I take a quick nap so that I can feel refreshed.

제안: 친구들과 외출한다는 직접적인 답변과 귀가 후 잠을 잔다는 대조가 있습니다. 하지만 “when I back to home”은 “when I get back home”으로, “as possible”은 “as soon as possible”로 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 “feel sleepy too”보다 “even when I feel tired”가 자연스럽고, 피곤해도 외출하는 이유나 오래 있지 않는다는 구체적인 설명을 추가하면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

예시: Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends even when I feel tired, especially if we have made plans in advance. However, I usually leave early and go to bed as soon as I get back home.

× Yes, I frequently feel tired because of my study and running.

✓ Yes, I frequently feel tired because of studying and running.

The nouns studying and running should use parallel -ing forms because they describe two activities. Using studying makes the structure more natural and grammatically balanced.

× I feel tired when I get up early and sometimes I sleep only five hours so it makes me sleepy.

✓ I feel tired when I get up early, and sometimes I sleep only five hours, so I feel sleepy.

The original sentence incorrectly uses it to refer to the situation of sleeping for only five hours. The subject I should be repeated in the final clause: I feel sleepy. Commas also help separate the connected ideas clearly.

× It is drink coffee and go to bed bed right now.

✓ I drink coffee or go to bed right away.

The original sentence has an incorrect sentence structure. It is cannot be followed directly by the base verbs drink and go in this context. Use I as the subject, and use or because the speaker is describing two possible actions. The repeated word bed was also removed.

× But when I back to home, I go to bed as possible.

✓ But when I go back home, I go to bed as soon as possible.

Back cannot function as the main verb, so it must be used with go. The natural expression is go back home, without the preposition to before home. The expression as soon as possible is also required to express the meaning of immediately or without delay.

× But when I back to home, I go to bed as possible.

✓ But when I go back home, I go to bed as soon as possible.

As possible is incomplete and does not correctly modify the verb go. The fixed adverbial expression as soon as possible should be used to explain when the speaker goes to bed.