Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid unclear or repeated phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Check word choice and grammar: say “I often feel tired,” “after a long day at work,” and “it is difficult to feel energetic,” rather than using incorrect expressions such as “he wants to feel quiet” or “a lonely at work.”

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day at work. I sometimes feel exhausted even when I am at home because my job can be quite demanding. However, I usually feel better after taking a short break or getting a good night’s sleep.

제안: Give a direct answer that identifies specific situations, not only your current life stage. Add a linking word such as “especially” or “because,” and explain why work makes you tired. Also, remove “Yes,” because the question asks “when,” not a yes-or-no question.

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening, especially after I have worked for several hours. Since I started working full-time, I often feel exhausted when I get home because I have to concentrate throughout the day.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear example, but improve the grammar and naturalness. Use “lie on the bed” or, more naturally, “lie in bed,” and say “after a long day” instead of “after long.” You could also explain how this activity helps you relax.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually lie in bed and watch short videos on TikTok or Facebook. It helps me switch off after a long day at work. If I am extremely tired, I put my phone away and take a short nap instead.

제안: Start with a direct response such as “Usually, no,” and then explain your routine. Avoid contradictory statements like “But yes, I don’t,” and correct the tense and frequency expression: say “I still hang out with them about once a month.” Use a linking word such as “however” to show the exception clearly.

예시: Usually, no. After a long day at work, I prefer to stay at home and rest rather than go out. However, I still meet my friends about once a month because I do not want to lose touch with them, even if I am tired.

× He wants to feel quiet and exhausted even after school, after a lonely at work or even at home.

✓ I tend to feel quite exhausted even after school, after a long day at work, or even at home.

The speaker is talking about personal experience, so the subject pronoun should be I, not he. Using he changes the meaning and creates an unnecessary shift in perspective.

× He wants to feel quiet and exhausted even after school, after a lonely at work or even at home.

✓ I tend to feel quite exhausted even after school, after a long day at work, or even at home.

Quite is an adverb that modifies the adjective exhausted. Quiet means having little or no noise, so it does not express the intended meaning here. Also, lonely does not correctly describe a workday; long is the appropriate adjective.

× It's it's very in, it's very humid to feel better.

✓ It's very hard to feel better.

Hard is the appropriate adjective to describe difficulty. Humid describes air containing a lot of moisture and does not fit the intended meaning in this context. The repeated and incomplete wording should also be reduced to one clear clause.

× Simply, I just lay on the bed and watch videos on Tiktok or Facebook.

✓ Simply, I just lie on the bed and watch videos on TikTok or Facebook.

The answer describes a usual action, so the present-tense form lie is needed. Lay is generally the past-tense form of lie when it means to recline.

× That's how I rest myself after long.

✓ That's how I rest after a long day.

Long must modify a noun in this sentence. The noun day requires the indefinite article a because it refers to one nonspecific day.

× There were at least once a month that I still hang hung out with them.

✓ I still hang out with them at least once a month.

The there were construction is unnecessary and does not agree with the time expression once a month. Because this describes a regular present habit, use the base form hang, not the past form hung. The correct phrasal verb is hang out.

× When I'm tired, I'm tired, that's it.

✓ When I'm tired, I'm tired. That's it.

The original contains two independent clauses joined only by a comma, which creates a comma splice. Separate the clauses with a period to make the sentence structure grammatically correct.