Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接并且有原因，但“an exam candidate that have”存在主谓和关系代词错误，应改为“an exam candidate who has to...”。“revise intensively”较自然，但“every day”重复感较强。建议使用“because”连接原因，并补充一个具体结果，例如影响注意力或睡眠。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m preparing for important exams and have to study intensively every day. As a result, I sometimes feel exhausted and find it difficult to concentrate in the evening.

제안: 回答基本回应了问题，但句子结构不清晰，存在明显的词汇和语法错误，如“they’re or some day to”“it will be really fatigue”。应使用“on days when I have to attend cram school”和“it is difficult to relax”等准确表达。注意避免重复使用“every day”，并用一个清晰的时间场景作答。

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening, especially on days when I have to attend cram school after my regular classes. By the time I get home, I have very little energy left to do my homework or relax.

제안: 回答包含了休息、午睡和喝饮料等具体做法，内容较完整，但有重复和不自然表达，如“for for”“some something like have a drink”和“it made me have energy”。建议使用更简洁的句式，并说明休息后的效果。通常短暂休息或小睡20到30分钟会比“fifty minutes”更自然。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break, have a glass of water, or take a 20-minute nap. This helps me recharge and gives me enough energy to finish my work.

제안: 回答表达了“视情况而定”的观点，也提到了提前约定和重要活动，但句子连接混乱，且“in early time”“I will go down”不符合语境。可以用“if we have made plans in advance”和“even if I feel tired”清楚地表达条件。建议加入对比：普通聚会可能取消，重要活动仍会参加。

예시: It depends on the situation. If we have made plans in advance or it is a special occasion, I will probably go out even if I feel tired. However, I may cancel a casual gathering and stay home to rest.

× Yes, I often feel tired because I am an exam candidate that have to revise intensively every day, so I often feel quite exhausted.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because I am an exam candidate who has to revise intensively every day, so I often feel quite exhausted.

关系代词 who 指代单数名词 candidate，因此后面的动词要使用第三人称单数形式 has，不能使用 have。

× I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day and if they're or some day to I have to go to cram school it will be really fatigue for me to relax.

✓ I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day, and if there are some days when I have to go to cram school, it will be really tiring for me, and I will not have time to relax.

这里需要使用 there be 句型表示“有一些日子”。some days 是复数，所以要使用 there are；they're 是 they are 的缩写，不能表示“有”。

× I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day and if they're or some day to I have to go to cram school it will be really fatigue for me to relax.

✓ I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day, and if there are some days when I have to go to cram school, it will be really tiring for me, and I will not have time to relax.

表示“在某些日子需要去补习班”时，应使用 when 引导时间从句，不能使用不完整的 to。建议记忆结构：some days when + 主语 + 动词。

× I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day and if they're or some day to I have to go to cram school it will be really fatigue for me to relax.

✓ I feel really tired every day because I study at a school every day, and if there are some days when I have to go to cram school, it will be really tiring for me, and I will not have time to relax.

fatigue 是名词，不能直接放在 be 后面作形容词。这里要表达“令人疲惫的”，应使用形容词 tiring。注意 tiring 表示“令人疲惫的”，tired 表示“感到疲惫的”。

× Actually when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or some something like have a drink because it made me have energy to do many things.

✓ Actually, when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or have a drink because it gives me energy to do many things.

for 被重复使用了一次。表示持续时间时，只需要使用一个 for，例如 for approximately fifty minutes。

× Actually when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or some something like have a drink because it made me have energy to do many things.

✓ Actually, when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or have a drink because it gives me energy to do many things.

some something like have a drink 结构不完整且重复。这里可以用并列结构 to take a nap or have a drink，使两个动作形式保持一致。回答时要避免重复词语，并确保 or 两边的动词结构平行。

× Actually when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or some something like have a drink because it made me have energy to do many things.

✓ Actually, when I feel very tired and have a lot of things to do, I would like to take a break for approximately fifty minutes to take a nap or have a drink because it gives me energy to do many things.

这句话描述的是通常性的习惯和结果，所以应使用一般现在时。made 是过去式，应该改为 gives，表示“休息会给我能量”。

× I think it depends on the time that and the occasion, because if we had decided to hang out with each other in early time and And it's an important event. I will go out if I will go down even if I am tired.

✓ I think it depends on the time and the occasion, because if we have already decided to hang out and it is an important event, I will go out even if I am tired.

the time that and the occasion 中的 that 使用多余；and And 也重复了连词。连接两个并列名词时直接使用 the time and the occasion；连接两个条件时只保留一个 and。

× I think it depends on the time that and the occasion, because if we had decided to hang out with each other in early time and And it's an important event. I will go out if I will go down even if I am tired.

✓ I think it depends on the time and the occasion, because if we have already decided to hang out and it is an important event, I will go out even if I am tired.

in early time 不是自然的英语表达。表示“提前约好”或“早些时候”时，可以直接说 early，或使用 at an early time。这里使用 hang out 后省略多余的 with each other，句子会更自然。

× I think it depends on the time that and the occasion, because if we had decided to hang out with each other in early time and And it's an important event. I will go out if I will go down even if I am tired.

✓ I think it depends on the time and the occasion, because if we have already decided to hang out and it is an important event, I will go out even if I am tired.

这是在描述一般情况下的决定，而不是过去某个已经结束的情况，因此 had decided 不合适。可以使用现在完成时 have already decided，表示“已经决定”。

× I think it depends on the time that and the occasion, because if we had decided to hang out with each other in early time and And it's an important event. I will go out if I will go down even if I am tired.

✓ I think it depends on the time and the occasion, because if we have already decided to hang out and it is an important event, I will go out even if I am tired.

在 if 引导的条件从句中，通常不用 will 表示将来，而使用一般现在时。这里不应说 if I will go down；而且该短语意思不清，直接使用 even if I am tired 就能表达“即使我很累”。