Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in the present tense: “I don’t often feel tired now.” Then explain the change clearly. Correct the grammar in “I was often feel tired” to “I often felt tired,” and replace “pay iron pill” with “take iron pills.” Avoid the unclear phrase “my tiredness diet get improved”; say “my tiredness has improved since then.”

예시: I don’t often feel tired now. I used to feel tired quite frequently, but my doctor recommended that I take iron pills twice a week. Since then, my energy levels have improved significantly.

제안: The answer is relevant and includes specific situations, but improve the second sentence by using parallel grammar. Say “if I stay up late or get up very early” instead of “stay up late or very early in the morning.” Use “work overtime” rather than “do overtime,” and connect the ideas more smoothly with “Also” or “Especially.”

예시: I usually feel tired in the evening, especially after I work overtime. I feel even more exhausted if I stay up late or have to get up very early the next morning.

제안: Give a clear, natural list of actions and avoid repeating words such as “the” and “like.” “Footballing” is not suitable here; if you mean soaking your feet, say “take a foot bath.” Use “I usually put on some music and take a short nap” instead of “I will like put on.” Finish with a clear result, such as feeling relaxed and refreshed.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a warm foot bath and listen to some relaxing music. If I have enough time, I also take a short nap. These activities help me relax and recharge.

제안: Start with a direct answer and give one clear reason. Replace “I’m a more introverted” with “I’m quite introverted” or “I’m more of an introvert.” Avoid repeating “charging my energy” and the unclear phrase “stay alone tailors.” Say “I prefer to spend some time alone and look after myself.” Use “so” to show the logical connection between your preference and your decision not to go out.

예시: No, I usually stay at home when I feel tired. I’m quite introverted, so I prefer to spend some time alone and look after myself. I might take a bath, watch something relaxing, or go to bed early so that I can recharge.

× I was often feel tired when before I taking the iron pill.

✓ I often felt tired before I started taking iron pills.

For a past habit, use the simple past form felt, not was feel. The phrase before I started taking correctly shows that taking the pills began after the period of feeling tired.

× before I taking the iron pill

✓ before I started taking iron pills

After started, use the -ing form taking. Also, the natural structure is started taking, not was taking in this context.

× my doctor recommended me to pay iron pill twice a week

✓ My doctor recommended taking iron pills twice a week.

Recommend is normally followed by a gerund or a that-clause, not recommended me to. Use recommended taking or recommended that I take. The verb pay is not appropriate for medicine; the correct verb is take.

× my tiredness diet get improved

✓ My tiredness has improved.

Use the present perfect has improved to describe a past change that still affects the present. Tiredness is an uncountable singular noun, so the verb must be has, not get.

× I right now I don't often feel tired.

✓ Right now, I don't often feel tired.

Right now is placed naturally at the beginning of the sentence. The first I is unnecessary because the sentence already has the subject I.

× I feel tired usually in the evening.

✓ I usually feel tired in the evening.

Frequency adverbs such as usually normally come before the main verb feel. The time expression in the evening can remain at the end.

× I will feel more tired if I stay up late or very early in the morning.

✓ I will feel more tired if I stay up late or get up very early in the morning.

The second part of the if-clause needs a verb. Add get up before very early so that both alternatives have complete verb phrases.

× I really like to enjoy the the footballing.

✓ I really like to enjoy football.

Do not repeat the definite article the. However, footballing is not the natural noun for the activity; football is the appropriate word if you mean playing or watching football.

× when I do the foot bathing

✓ when I take a foot bath

The expression take a foot bath requires the indefinite article a because it refers to one foot bath in general. The phrase do the foot bathing is not the usual English expression.

× I will like put on some music and then take a small nap.

✓ I would like to put on some music and then take a short nap.

Use would like to when expressing a preference or desire. The infinitive marker to is required before put. Will like is not appropriate for this meaning.

× Just kind of like, uh, into a fully re relaxed mode.

✓ It helps me get into a fully relaxed mode.

The original phrase has no complete subject and finite verb, so it is a sentence fragment. Add It helps me get to form a complete sentence.

× Maybe because I'm a more introverted.

✓ Maybe because I'm more introverted.

The article a cannot be used directly before the adjective introverted when no noun follows it. Say I'm more introverted, or say I'm a more introverted person.

× The way that I recover my energy charging, charging my energy, charging up my energy.

✓ The way I recharge my energy is by staying alone and taking care of my body.

The original sentence is incomplete because it does not contain a main verb. Use is by to connect the subject The way I recharge my energy with the method that follows.

× It's like, uh, stay alone tailors taking care of my body like that

✓ It's like staying alone and taking care of my body.

After like, use the -ing form when describing an activity. Use staying and taking, and connect the two activities with and. The phrase taking care of correctly uses the -ing form after staying alone and like.

× so I avoid

✓ so I avoid going out with my friends.

Avoid must be followed by a noun or a gerund, not left without an object in this context. Use avoid going out to explain what you avoid.