Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly by saying how often you feel tired. Avoid unclear phrases such as “my horse” and “my world end up.” Use natural expressions like “I feel exhausted” or “I have no energy.” Also, use the correct structure “before continuing my work” and provide one specific reason or situation.

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day at work or school. When that happens, I usually have no energy and do not feel like doing anything. I normally take a short nap before continuing with my other tasks.

제안: Give a clear time or situation in the first sentence, such as after work, after studying, or late at night. Replace unnatural phrases like “end up energies,” “gain up my energy,” and “receive more energy” with “run out of energy” or “recharge my batteries.” Avoid repetition and connect your examples with a linking word such as “especially” or “because.”

예시: I usually feel tired after I finish work or study for several hours. I especially notice it late at night, when I have already used up most of my energy. At that point, I need to rest for a while before doing anything else.

제안: The answer is relevant and gives several actions, but “go for eating” and “fulfill my energy” are not natural expressions. Say “have something to eat” and “restore my energy.” Avoid repeating “whenever” and explain the result more clearly, such as feeling refreshed and being able to continue working.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or have something to eat. A nap helps me relax, while a light meal gives me enough energy to continue my work. After that, I normally feel refreshed and ready to finish my tasks.

제안: Start with a clear answer such as “Usually, no” or “Sometimes, yes.” Use correct forms: “prefer sleeping and eating,” “go shopping,” “go for a walk,” “reduce my stress,” and “feel comfortable.” Avoid repeating “sometimes” and give one specific condition explaining when you would still meet your friends.

예시: Usually, I prefer to stay at home and rest when I feel tired. However, if I am stressed rather than physically exhausted, I may go out with my friends for a walk or some shopping. Spending time with them helps me relax and reduces my stress.

× Of course, whenever I feel tired, I feel like my horse, my world, uh, particularly end up at that time.

✓ Of course, whenever I feel tired, I feel like my whole world is ending.

The original sentence is not structurally complete or logically organized. The phrase my horse appears to be an incorrect word choice or transcription error, and the verb phrase needs a clear subject and verb. Use feel like + subject + verb to express this idea.

× I usually go to sleep and take a nap before, uh, continue working on the other.

✓ I usually go to sleep or take a nap before continuing to work on something else.

After the preposition before, use a gerund with the -ing form when the subject is understood to be the same as the main subject. Therefore, use before continuing, not before continue. The phrase something else is also needed to complete the meaning.

× Whenever I feel like, uh, I end up energies, especially for, uh, at the moment I, and I finish my job, I finish my homework or study at that time, I just want to, uh, gain up my energy.

✓ Whenever I feel that I am running out of energy, especially after I finish work, my homework, or my studies, I just want to regain my energy.

The original sentence contains incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses, such as I end up energies and especially for. A complete clause requires a subject and a correctly formed verb. Organize the ideas with after and use running out of energy to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Especially for, uh, at the moment I, and I finish my job, I finish my homework or study at that time.

✓ Especially after I finish work, my homework, or my studies, I feel tired.

Use after to introduce the event that happens before feeling tired. The preposition for does not correctly express this time relationship. Also, finish work is the natural expression when referring generally to the end of a work period.

× I usually go to sleep or take a nap or maybe I would go for eating.

✓ I usually go to sleep or take a nap, or maybe I would go out to eat.

After go out to, use the base form of the verb, eat, rather than the -ing form eating. The expression go out to eat is the natural grammatical structure for this meaning.

× Whenever I take a nap or eating, I feel like I fulfill my energy.

✓ Whenever I take a nap or eat, I feel like I regain my energy.

The two verbs joined by or should have parallel forms. Because take is in the base form, use eat rather than eating. Use regain my energy instead of fulfill my energy because regain is the appropriate verb for recovering energy.

× I feel like I fulfill my energy and I have prepared for the next move.

✓ I feel like I regain my energy and prepare for the next activity.

The verbs regain and prepare should be parallel after the conjunction and. Use prepare rather than have prepared because the sentence describes a usual result of taking a nap or eating.

× As I said, I prefer to sleep and eating.

✓ As I said, I prefer to sleep and eat.

The two verbs after prefer to should be parallel. Since sleep follows the infinitive marker to, use the base form eat rather than the gerund eating.

× Sometime, sometime I usually go out with my friend.

✓ Sometimes, I usually go out with my friends.

Use sometimes, with an s, when referring to an occasional action. Sometimes is an adverb, whereas sometime generally refers to an unspecified point in time. Friends is also more natural when referring generally to people you go out with.

× I usually go out with my friend in order to, uh, shopping or maybe just walk out or just working.

✓ I usually go out with my friends in order to shop, walk around, or work out.

After in order to, use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Therefore, use shop and work rather than shopping and working. The verbs in the list should also remain parallel: shop, walk, or work.

× I feel really comfort.

✓ I feel really comfortable.

After the linking verb feel, use an adjective to describe the subject. Comfortable is the adjective, while comfort is usually a noun or a verb. Adverbs such as really can modify the adjective comfortable.