Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct, well organized, and supported with specific details about your job and daily routine. The linking word “so” clearly shows the result. However, “have a rest” is understandable but less natural than “get some rest” or “take a break.” You could also avoid repeating “tired” by replacing the second occurrence with “worn out” or “drained.”

예시: Yes, I often feel exhausted after work. I spend most of the day doing paperwork and visiting patients, so by the evening I feel completely drained and just want to get some rest.

제안: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant example and reason. However, there are vocabulary and spelling problems: “trendmill” should be “treadmill,” and “hardweight training” should be “weight training” or “strength training.” Saying “after about thirteen minutes” sounds overly precise unless that timing is meaningful; “after a short time” or “after about fifteen minutes” would sound more natural. Use accurate, context-appropriate vocabulary rather than an unnatural phrase.

예시: I usually feel tired after intense exercise. For instance, I start feeling exhausted after running on a treadmill or doing strength training for about fifteen minutes because the workout is physically demanding.

제안: Your response has a clear topic sentence and two well-developed examples, with “sometimes” and “other times” creating good organization. The main error is “When I feel tight,” which should be “When I feel tired”; “tight” usually describes something physically firm or restricted. Also, beginning the third sentence with “And” is acceptable in casual speech, but “Alternatively” or “If I have more time” would create a smoother link.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually use a few different ways to recharge. Sometimes I make a cup of coffee and sit quietly for a few minutes to regain my focus. If I have enough time, I take a short, twenty-minute nap so that I feel refreshed afterward.

제안: You give a clear answer and provide a sensible contrast between ordinary invitations and important occasions. However, “attend the invitation” is incorrect; you should say “attend the event” or “go to the gathering.” The phrase “because I don't miss it” is also unclear, and “I don't want to miss it” repeats the same idea. Replace the repetition with a specific reason, such as celebrating a close friend’s birthday.

예시: When I feel really tired, I usually tell my friends that I need to rest and politely decline their invitations. However, if it is an important occasion, such as a close friend’s birthday, I will still go because I do not want to miss the celebration.