Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答观点明确，也提供了原因和应对方式，但时态、句式和动词形式错误较多。应将“when I was working”改为一般现在时“when I work”，将“just watching”改为“just watch”，并使用连接词把长句拆开，例如“After that”或“Therefore”。“It relaxed me”应改为“It helps me relax”。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired when I work or study for a long time. When that happens, I usually take a short break and watch some television for fun. It helps me relax and feel more energetic.

제안: 回答结构清楚，并且有具体例子，但一般现在时和过去时混用。应将“when I was working”改为“when I work”，将“when I finished a test”改为“after I finish a test”。“such as English or Maths”可以改为更自然的“such as an English or maths test”。

예시: I usually feel tired when I work or study for a long time. For example, I often feel exhausted after I finish a difficult test, such as an English or maths exam. It takes me a while to recover afterward.

제안: 回答包含两个具体活动，但“play with my phone”“stream a video”和“didn't sync anymore”表达不自然，且时态混乱。“didn't sync anymore”不符合语境，可能想表达“暂时不去想学习或工作”。建议使用“use my phone to watch videos”，并用“Besides that”连接第二个活动。

예시: I usually use my phone to watch short videos when I feel tired. It helps me switch off and stop thinking about work or studying for a while. Besides that, I sometimes meditate if I feel really exhausted.

제안: 回答直接，理由和例子具体，整体逻辑较好。由于问题是一般情况，第一句应使用“No, I don’t”，而不是“No, I didn’t”。结尾不需要重复修改词语；“It feels relaxing”或“It helps me rest and recharge”更自然。

예시: No, I don’t. I usually stay at home when I’m tired because I don’t have enough energy to socialize. For example, I watch movies or catch up on videos to rest and recharge. Staying at home feels relaxing and helps me recover.

× Yes, I often feel tired and I am not energetic when I was working or studying for a long time I need to take a break and just watching the television for fun. It relaxed me a lot.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired and not energetic when I work or study for a long time. I need to take a break and just watch television for fun. It relaxes me a lot.

这里描述的是通常发生的情况，所以应使用一般现在时。将“was working/studying”改为“work/study”，将“relaxed”改为“relaxes”。主语“It”是第三人称单数，因此动词要加-s。

× Yes, I often feel tired and I am not energetic when I was working or studying for a long time I need to take a break and just watching the television for fun. It relaxed me a lot.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired and not energetic when I work or study for a long time. I need to take a break and just watch television for fun. It relaxes me a lot.

情态词或助动词“need to”后面应接动词原形，因此“just watching”应改为“just watch”。

× Yes, I often feel tired and I am not energetic when I was working or studying for a long time I need to take a break and just watching the television for fun. It relaxed me a lot.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired and not energetic when I work or study for a long time. I need to take a break and just watch television for fun. It relaxes me a lot.

原句把多个完整意思连续放在一起，中间缺少句号或连接词，形成长句。应拆分成几个完整句子，使表达更清楚。

× Yes, I often feel tired and I am not energetic when I was working or studying for a long time I need to take a break and just watching the television for fun. It relaxed me a lot.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired and not energetic when I work or study for a long time. I need to take a break and just watch television for fun. It relaxes me a lot.

表示通常观看电视这一活动时，通常说“watch television”，不需要在“television”前使用定冠词“the”。

× I feel tired when I was working or studying for a long time.

✓ I feel tired when I work or study for a long time.

这句话描述一般情况，而不是过去某个特定时间发生的事情，所以“was working/studying”应改为一般现在时“work/study”。

× For example, I often feel exhausted when I finished a test such as English or Maths.

✓ For example, I often feel exhausted when I finish a test, such as an English or Maths test.

“often”表示经常发生的情况，因此“finished”应改为一般现在时“finish”。

× For example, I often feel exhausted when I finished a test such as English or Maths.

✓ For example, I often feel exhausted when I finish a test, such as an English or Maths test.

“English or Maths”在这里修饰“test”，为了使名词短语完整，应补充“test”。“English”以元音音素开头，所以说“an English test”。

× I usually play with my phone and stream a video and didn't sync anymore when I play the phone.

✓ I usually play on my phone, stream videos, and don't do anything else when I use it.

这里描述的是通常行为，可以用复数“videos”表示泛指多个视频。使用复数能使表达更自然。

× I usually play with my phone and stream a video and didn't sync anymore when I play the phone.

✓ I usually play on my phone, stream videos, and don't do anything else when I use it.

“usually”表示习惯性行为，因此应使用一般现在时。“didn't”是过去时，应改为“don't”。

× I usually play with my phone and stream a video and didn't sync anymore when I play the phone.

✓ I usually play on my phone, stream videos, and don't do anything else when I use it.

英语中通常说“play on my phone”，而不说“play the phone”。表示使用手机时，也可以说“use my phone”。

× I usually play with my phone and stream a video and didn't sync anymore when I play the phone.

✓ I usually play on my phone, stream videos, and don't do anything else when I use it.

原句连续使用多个“and”，结构混乱，而且“didn't sync anymore”的意思不清楚。可以使用并列结构“play..., stream..., and...”来表达多个习惯性动作。

× No, I didn't. I usually stay at home when I'm tired because I don't have much energy to socialize.

✓ No, I don't. I usually stay at home when I'm tired because I don't have much energy to socialize.

问题使用的是一般现在时“do you still go out”，询问的是平时的习惯，所以回答应使用“No, I don't”，而不是过去时“No, I didn't”。

× It may feel relaxable, relaxing.

✓ It may feel relaxing, and it helps me feel relaxed.

“relaxable”通常不用于描述人的感受或活动。描述某件事使人感到放松时，可以用“relaxing”；描述人的状态时，应使用“relaxed”。