Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 「Yes, I often feel tired」を最初に明確に述べましょう。「taired」は「tired」、「when I finished」は習慣なので「when I finish」、「back to home」は「get home」が自然です。また、「terrorist time」と「for noon」は意味が不自然です。仕事から帰宅した後が一日の中で最も疲れる時間だと、理由や具体的な状況を1文加えると、内容がより明確になります。

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after work. When I get home, I usually feel exhausted because I have to concentrate for most of the day. The late afternoon is probably the most tiring time for me.

제안: 質問に対して「I usually feel tired when...」という完全な文で直接答えましょう。「Just like」はこの文脈では「when」に置き換え、「get back to my home」は「get home」とします。「terrorist time」は誤用なので、「the most tiring part of the day」または「the hardest time of the day」を使ってください。最後は「I just want to stay at home and do nothing」のように自然な語順にし、理由を加えると効果的です。

예시: I usually feel tired when I finish work and get home. This is the most tiring part of my day because I have been busy since the morning. I just want to stay at home and do nothing for a while.

제안: 内容は質問に合っており、食事とYouTubeという具体例もあります。ただし、習慣を表すため「I will」より「I usually」や現在形を使うと自然です。「YouTube video」は「YouTube videos」、「just the relaxing scenes」は「relaxing videos」または「videos with relaxing scenes」としましょう。「At the same time」より「while」が会話では自然で、食べ物の例を1つ加えると語彙と具体性が向上します。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually get something delicious to eat, such as noodles or ice cream. While I’m eating, I watch relaxing videos on YouTube. This helps me forget about work and unwind.

제안: まず「Usually, no」または「It depends」と答えて、立場を明確にしましょう。「Trader」はおそらく「Rather」または「Usually」の誤りです。「do something with anybody」は「spend time with anyone」、「a date inside I decided before」は「a plan I made in advance」とすると自然です。また、「I will go」は条件文では「I’ll still go」にし、友人との約束を守る理由を加えると回答がより説得力を持ちます。

예시: Usually, no. When I’m tired, I prefer to stay home and spend some time alone. However, if I have already made plans with a friend, I’ll still go because I don’t want to cancel at the last minute.

× Yeah, I often feel taired actually when I finished my work and I'm back to home and it is a terrorist time of the day for noon.

✓ Yeah, I often feel tired when I finish my work, get back home, and reach the toughest part of the day.

Because the student is describing a regular routine, the present tense should be used: finish, not finished. The phrase get back home does not require the preposition to. The expression a terrorist time is not appropriate here; a suitable adjective is toughest.

× Yeah, I often feel taired actually when I finished my work and I'm back to home and it is a terrorist time of the day for noon.

✓ Yeah, I often feel tired when I finish my work, get back home, and reach the toughest part of the day.

We normally say get back home, not get back to home. Home can be used without a preposition after verbs of movement such as go, come, and get back.

× Yeah, I often feel taired actually when I finished my work and I'm back to home and it is a terrorist time of the day for noon.

✓ Yeah, I often feel tired when I finish my work, get back home, and reach the toughest part of the day.

Terrorist describes a person who uses violence and does not fit this meaning. To describe a difficult period, use an adjective such as toughest or most tiring. Also, tired is the correct spelling.

× Just like I finish my work and get back to my home.

✓ When I finish work and get back home, I feel tired.

Just like introduces a comparison, not a time situation. Use when to introduce the time at which the action happens. The revised sentence is also complete because it includes the main clause I feel tired.

× Just like I finish my work and get back to my home.

✓ When I finish work and get back home, I feel tired.

The natural expression is get back home, without to. Home functions as an adverb of place in this expression.

× Just like I finish my work and get back to my home.

✓ When I finish work and get back home, I feel tired.

The original is an incomplete sentence because it begins with a time clause but has no main clause. Add a main clause, such as I feel tired, to express a complete idea.

× This is the terrorist time of the day and I don't want to do anything just staying

✓ This is the toughest time of the day, and I do not want to do anything; I just want to stay in and relax.

The question asks about a usual situation, so use the present tense. The phrase do not want ... just staying is not grammatically parallel. Use want to stay, because want is followed by the to-infinitive.

× This is the terrorist time of the day and I don't want to do anything just staying

✓ This is the toughest time of the day, and I do not want to do anything; I just want to stay in and relax.

After want, use to plus the base verb: want to stay, not want staying. The verb relax is also coordinated with stay using the same to-infinitive structure.

× When I feel tired I will find something delicious to eat and at the same time I will watch YouTube video just the relaxing scenes.

✓ When I feel tired, I find something delicious to eat and watch YouTube videos with relaxing scenes at the same time.

The student is describing a habitual response, so the simple present is more appropriate: find and watch, not will find and will watch. The adverbial time clause When I feel tired already establishes the routine.

× When I feel tired I will find something delicious to eat and at the same time I will watch YouTube video just the relaxing scenes.

✓ When I feel tired, I find something delicious to eat and watch YouTube videos with relaxing scenes at the same time.

YouTube videos refers to videos in general, so the plural form videos is appropriate. A singular countable noun would require an article, such as a YouTube video.

× Trader if I am tired, I don't want to do something with anybody, but if there is a date inside I decided before I will go with my friend.

✓ Rather, if I am tired, I do not want to do anything with anybody, but if I have a date that I arranged beforehand, I will go with my friend.

The answer describes a general situation, so do not want is more consistent than an isolated future form. In the if-clause, use the present tense have; the future will is used in the main clause: I will go.

× Trader if I am tired, I don't want to do something with anybody, but if there is a date inside I decided before I will go with my friend.

✓ Rather, if I am tired, I do not want to do anything with anybody, but if I have a date that I arranged beforehand, I will go with my friend.

In a negative sentence, use anything rather than something: I do not want to do anything. Something is generally used in affirmative sentences, while anything is used in negatives and questions.

× Trader if I am tired, I don't want to do something with anybody, but if there is a date inside I decided before I will go with my friend.

✓ Rather, if I am tired, I do not want to do anything with anybody, but if I have a date that I arranged beforehand, I will go with my friend.

The arrangement was made before the present or future date, so the past tense arranged is needed. The phrase I decided before is incomplete because decide normally needs an object or a more specific expression in this context.