Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 「No, I don’t.」と最初に明確に答えた後、過去との対比と現在の習慣を整理してください。「previously」はこの文脈では「以前は」なので「I used to feel tired very often」のほうが自然です。また、「dairy routine」は「daily routine」の誤りで、最後の文が未完なので、結果まで言い切る必要があります。習慣には現在形を使い、「As a result」などのつなぎ語の前には句読点を置いてください。

예시: No, I don’t. I used to feel tired quite often, so I changed my daily routine. I try to get enough sleep, avoid staying up late, and exercise regularly. As a result, I rarely feel tired these days.

제안: 曜日について答える場合は、「I usually feel tired on Fridays」のように一般的な習慣を表す複数形が自然です。理由を述べた後に「as a result」を置くと論理が不自然なので、ここでは「because」だけで十分です。回答が途中で終わっているため、「そのため金曜日に疲れる」という意味を最後まで完成させ、実験や平日の忙しさを具体的に説明してください。

예시: I usually feel tired on Fridays because we have a lot of animal experiments during the week. The work is quite demanding, and I often have to concentrate for several hours at a time. By Friday evening, I’m usually exhausted.

제안: 全体の構成は明確で、睡眠と運動という具体的な対策も述べられています。ただし、「sleep for long hours」は「get extra sleep」、「the most important solution for feeling tired」は「the best way to recover from tiredness」のほうが自然です。また、「go to the gym for workout」は「work out at the gym」、「the feeling of tired」は「tiredness」または「fatigue」に直してください。睡眠と運動が自分にどのように役立つかを一言加えると、内容がより具体的になります。

예시: When I feel tired, I usually get some extra sleep because it helps me recover quickly. I may also work out at the gym for about an hour. Exercise helps me relax and reduces my fatigue, especially after a stressful day.

제안: まず「No, I don’t」と直接答え、その後に理由を一つずつ説明してください。「sluggish」は使えますが、この質問では「tired」のほうが自然で簡潔です。「cannot enjoy activities」は「can’t really enjoy myself」、「cool my fearing」は意味が不明確で、おそらく「my bad mood might make my friends feel worse」と表現できます。また、「children」は文脈上「friends」の誤りと思われます。理由と結果を「because」や「so」で整理し、最後まで明確に言い切ってください。

예시: No, I don’t usually go out with my friends when I feel tired. I can’t really enjoy myself, and I may be quiet or irritable. Also, my bad mood might affect my friends, so I prefer to stay home and rest.

× I tried to sleep for long hours and I try not to stay up late and I do regular exercise.

✓ I tried to sleep longer, tried not to stay up late, and exercised regularly.

The sentence describes the past routine that you adopted, so the verbs should be consistently used in the past tense: tried and exercised. Keep the same tense for actions that happened during that past period.

× As a result now I don't feel

✓ As a result, I do not feel tired now.

The original sentence is incomplete because feel needs a complement, such as tired. A complete sentence should include the subject, verb, and the word or phrase that completes the meaning.

× I usually feel tired on Friday because we have a lot of animal experiments on weekdays.

✓ I usually feel tired on Fridays because we have a lot of animal experiments on weekdays.

The sentence describes a repeated situation, so the plural form Fridays is more appropriate than the singular form Friday. Use a plural day name when referring to something that happens regularly.

× I usually feel tired on Friday because we have a lot of animal experiments on weekdays as a result. I

✓ I usually feel tired on Fridays because we have a lot of animal experiments on weekdays. As a result, I feel tired at the end of the week.

The original response ends with an incomplete fragment, As a result. I. Connect the result to a complete sentence with a subject and a verb.

× I may go to the gym for workout for about one hour.

✓ I may go to the gym for a workout for about one hour.

Workout is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the indefinite article a. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to one nonspecific activity.

× Exercise can also reduce the feeling of tired.

✓ Exercise can also reduce the feeling of tiredness.

Tired is an adjective and cannot function as the noun after the phrase the feeling of. Use the noun tiredness, or say reduce the feeling of being tired.

× Because when I'm tired I usually cannot enjoy activities and then maybe cool my fearing makes my children feel worse so I avoid it.

✓ When I am tired, I usually cannot enjoy activities, and perhaps my feelings make my children feel worse, so I avoid going out.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incorrectly formed phrase, cool my fearing, and too many ideas are joined without clear structure. Use separate clauses with clear subjects and verbs, and state the action you avoid explicitly: avoid going out.