Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 最初に「No, I don’t」と直接答えられており、理由も述べています。ただし、「but I sometimes I feel tired」は文法的に誤りで、「but I sometimes feel tired」とする必要があります。また、「part-time job」はハイフンを入れ、仕事の後に疲れる理由を短く加えると、より具体的で自然な回答になります。

예시: No, I don’t often feel tired, but I sometimes feel exhausted after my part-time job because I’m on my feet for several hours.

제안: 質問には「After my part-time job」と直接答えていますが、「my part-time job is cafe」は「I work at a café」、「I always standing standing」は「I’m always standing」と言い換える必要があります。また、「casher」は職業名なら「cashier」です。仕事内容を説明する際は、重複を避けて「I work both as a cashier and in the kitchen」と整理し、becauseなどの接続語で理由をつなげてください。

예시: I usually feel tired after my part-time job. I work at a café, where I spend several hours standing, serving customers, and helping in the kitchen. As a result, my legs and back often feel sore.

제안: 「睡眠を取る」という中心的な内容は伝わりますが、「try long sleep」は不自然なので「try to get a long sleep」または「get plenty of sleep」と言います。「I like sleep」はこの文脈では不要です。また、「fleshness」は誤用で、「I feel refreshed」と表現します。最初に行動を述べ、その結果を「After that」や「so」でつなぐと、より明確になります。

예시: I usually take a long nap or go to bed early because sleep helps me recover. After getting enough rest, I usually feel refreshed and ready to continue with my day.

제안: 「No, I don’t」と直接答え、家にいるという内容も述べていますが、最後の部分は言い直しが多く、文が未完成です。「try to make my condition better」よりも「try to recover」や「rest and improve my condition」が自然です。さらに、具体例を1つ加える場合は、例えば「I take a shower or watch a relaxing film」と続けると、5文以内で内容を豊かにできます。

예시: No, I usually stay at home when I feel tired. I try to recover by taking a shower, having a light meal, and going to bed early. I prefer resting at home rather than going out because I need to recharge.

× No I don't, but I sometimes I feel tired after my part time job.

✓ No, I don't, but I sometimes feel tired after my part-time job.

The subject I is repeated unnecessarily in I sometimes I feel. Use only one subject before the verb. Also, part-time is normally written with a hyphen when it modifies job.

× After my part time job actually my part time job is cafe and I always standing standing on casher and kitchen and contact with customers.

✓ After my part-time job, actually, my job is at a cafe, and I always stand at the cash register and work in the kitchen and contact customers.

A singular countable noun such as cafe usually needs an article, so use a cafe. The preposition at is appropriate for a workplace or position, and the phrase cash register is more natural than casher in this context.

× After my part time job actually my part time job is cafe and I always standing standing on casher and kitchen and contact with customers.

✓ After my part-time job, actually, my job is at a cafe, and I always stand at the cash register and work in the kitchen and contact customers.

After the adverb always, use the base form stand for a habitual action in the present tense. Do not use standing unless you are describing an action in progress with a form of be. Also, standing was repeated accidentally.

× After my part time job actually my part time job is cafe and I always standing standing on casher and kitchen and contact with customers.

✓ After my part-time job, actually, my job is at a cafe, and I always stand at the cash register and work in the kitchen and contact customers.

Use at with cash register to describe a work position or location, and use in with the kitchen because it refers to being inside that area. The preposition on is not natural in these phrases.

× I usually try long sleep because I like sleep and after long sleeping is is always fleshness feels fleshness.

✓ I usually try to sleep for a long time because I like sleeping, and after a long sleep, I always feel refreshed.

After try, use to plus the base verb: try to sleep. After like, sleeping is natural when discussing an activity in general. Use the noun phrase a long sleep rather than long sleeping in this sentence.

× I usually try long sleep because I like sleep and after long sleeping is is always fleshness feels fleshness.

✓ I usually try to sleep for a long time because I like sleeping, and after a long sleep, I always feel refreshed.

The original sentence has an incomplete and confusing structure around after long sleeping is is. A complete clause needs a subject and a correctly formed verb, so use I always feel refreshed.

× I usually try long sleep because I like sleep and after long sleeping is is always fleshness feels fleshness.

✓ I usually try to sleep for a long time because I like sleeping, and after a long sleep, I always feel refreshed.

Refreshed is the correct adjective to describe how you feel after sleeping. Freshness is a noun and cannot be used as the adjective in I feel freshness. Avoid repeating is and feels.

× No, I don't. When I feel tired, I absolutely stay at home and try to to my try to my conditioner my condition better for example

✓ No, I don't. When I feel tired, I usually stay at home and try to improve my condition, for example, by resting.

After try, use to plus the base verb: try to improve. The original phrase contains repeated and incomplete words. After by, use the -ing form resting to explain the method.

× No, I don't. When I feel tired, I absolutely stay at home and try to to my try to my conditioner my condition better for example

✓ No, I don't. When I feel tired, I usually stay at home and try to improve my condition, for example, by resting.

The phrase try to to my try to my conditioner is not a complete or logical sentence structure. Use the clear pattern try to improve my condition. The expression for example should introduce a specific example, such as by resting.