Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本直接，但“feel tired”被误说成“feel awful”，且存在明显的词语和语法问题，如“work work”“take my breath in June”和“pretty warm out”。这里应使用“take a break”“feel worn out”等自然表达。建议先回答频率，再说明工作时间和疲劳原因；最多使用3句，并用“so”连接结果。

예시: Yes, quite often. I usually work from around 10 a.m. to 5 p.m., and I don’t take many breaks during the day. So, by the end of the afternoon, I often feel completely worn out.

제안: 回答给出了具体时间，这是优点，但“fly a bitch”“my attention starts to draw”和“need a short breath”不符合英语表达，应该改为“feel exhausted”“my concentration starts to drop”和“take a short break”。建议使用“By then”和“because”清楚说明时间、原因及结果，并避免重复“already”和“attention”。

예시: I usually start feeling tired at around three or four in the afternoon. By then, I’ve been working for several hours, so my concentration starts to drop. That’s when I feel that I need to take a short break.

제안: 回答尝试描述具体景色，但“locate the window”应改为“look out of the window”，“My stud”应为“My office/study”，并且最后一句难以理解。建议先直接说明休息方式，再按顺序描述从窗户看到的花园和图书馆；使用“because”或“also”增强衔接。

예시: If I’m working, I usually look out of the window for a few minutes. My office is on the sixth floor, so I have a nice view. I can see a garden below and the main library building on campus, which helps me relax.

제안: 回答的核心意思可能是“会和朋友吃火锅”，但开头“I'm pretty likely to go out”更自然；“trying day”“asking my friend”“hot pitch”等表达不准确。建议明确回答“会/不会”，然后说明会邀请朋友吃火锅，并解释这样做能帮助自己放松。

예시: Yes, I probably would. If I’d had a really tiring day, I might ask a friend to have hot pot with me. It’s my favourite comfort food, and a good hot-pot meal really helps me relax.

× Yes quite awful actually.

✓ Yes, I feel quite awful, actually.

原句没有完整的谓语动词，因此是句子残缺。加入“I feel”后，句子结构完整。回答感受类问题时，可以使用“主语 + feel + 形容词”。

× So by the end of the day I usually pretty warm out.

✓ So by the end of the day, I usually feel pretty worn out.

“I usually pretty warm out”缺少谓语动词，而且“warm”不能表达“疲惫”。这里需要使用“feel + 形容词”，所以改为“I usually feel pretty worn out”。

× Probably three or four in the afternoon by then I've already been working for several hours so I already start to feel tired.

✓ Probably around three or four in the afternoon. By then, I've already been working for several hours, so I start to feel tired.

这个回答描述的是经常发生的情况，因此使用一般现在时“start”是合适的。将答案分成两个句子后，时间和因果关系更清楚。

× My stud is on the sixth floor so I's an open view.

✓ My study is on the sixth floor, so there is an open view.

原句中的“I's”不能正确表达“有一个开阔的景色”。表示某处存在某物时，应使用“There is + 单数名词”，所以改为“there is an open view”。

× I's an open view.

✓ There is an open view.

“I's”不是正确的英语表达。表示“有……”时，要使用“There is”或“There are”。因为“an open view”是单数，所以使用“There is”。

× I can also see the many library building on campus.

✓ I can also see the many library buildings on campus.

“many”后面必须接可数名词复数，因此“building”要改为“buildings”。“many library building”应改为“many library buildings”。

× I'd pretty go out actually.

✓ I'd probably go out, actually.

“pretty”不能直接表示“可能”，这里需要副词“probably”。“probably”通常放在助动词“would”之后、主要动词“go”之前。

× If I had a really trying day,

✓ If I had a really tiring day,

“tiring”表示“令人疲惫的”，用来描述一天；“tried”或“trying”不能准确表达这里的意思。描述事物造成的感受时，通常使用“-ing”形式的形容词，例如“a tiring day”。

× I could like asking my friend to go out for hot pot with me.

✓ I could ask my friend to go out for hot pot with me.

情态动词“could”后面必须接动词原形，不能接“like asking”。因此应使用“could ask”。结构是“could + 动词原形”。

× I could like asking my friend to go out for hot pot with me.

✓ I could ask my friend to go out for hot pot with me.

“could”后面不能使用动词的“-ing”形式。应该使用动词原形“ask”，所以不能说“could asking”，而应说“could ask”。

× to go for with a hot pitch with me

✓ to go out for hot pot with me

“go for with”不是正确的介词搭配。表示“出去吃火锅”时，可以使用“go out for hot pot”。这里的“with me”表示“和我一起”。

× It's by the basically my calm food fold and a good pot hot pot really does the streak.

✓ It's basically my comfort food, and a good hot pot really does the trick.

副词“basically”应放在系动词“is”之后，而不是放在“by the”之后。正确语序是“It is basically...”。“really”放在主要动词“does”之前，位置正确。