Tiredness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and phrasing errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. “feel tired” used many times).

예시: Yes, I often feel tired, particularly during busy study or work periods. For example, if I stay up late browsing my phone, I usually feel exhausted the next day and find it hard to concentrate.

제안: Fix repetition and grammar errors, and make the answer more specific and coherent. Use linking words such as “especially” and “for example,” and correct pronoun usage (you → I).

예시: I usually feel tired during particularly busy periods at the office. For example, when I have to work until one or two in the morning, I often get only three hours of sleep and feel exhausted the next day.

제안: Good structure and appropriate details. Improve grammar and article use, and make sentences slightly more natural and varied. Keep responses within 3–4 sentences.

예시: When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee because the caffeine helps me wake up. If that doesn't help, I go for a short walk to get some fresh air and, if possible, take a quick 20–30 minute nap at the office to recharge.

제안: Clear and well-organised answer. To improve further, use a brief topic sentence and link reasons with words like “because” or “so that.” Add a slightly more natural phrase for contrast (e.g. “rather than going out”).

예시: Not really; if I'm tired, I usually prefer to stay home and rest rather than go out. For instance, I might take a short nap or watch a calm movie so that I can feel energetic when I meet my friends the next day.

× Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I have things to do such as work or study.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I have things to do, such as work or study.

Missing comma before the example phrase 'such as work or study' is a punctuation/style issue related to sentence clarity while using present tense. Add a comma to separate the main clause and the example to improve readability.

× I feel very exhausted and when I stay up late using my phones, I feel very tired the next day.

✓ I feel very exhausted, and when I stay up late using my phone, I feel very tired the next day.

Incorrect plural form 'phones' when referring to a single device commonly used; also missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' linking independent clauses. Use singular 'phone' for consistency and add comma to join clauses.

× For example, if I have to stay stay late until one or two AM in the morning you usually only get three hours of sleep.

✓ For example, if I have to stay late until one or two a.m. in the morning, I usually only get three hours of sleep.

Repeated word 'stay' is a typographical error. Pronoun disagreement: original used 'you' which is inconsistent with 'I' in the conditional; change to 'I' to match speaker. Also add comma after the time clause and use standard 'a.m.' formatting.

× When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee because the caffeine helps me wake up.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually drink a cup of coffee because the caffeine helps me to wake up.

Both forms with or without 'to' are possible; adding 'to' ('helps me to wake up') is slightly more formal and clearer for learners. This suggestion follows the requested focus on correcting issues listed; present tense usage is fine.

× If I still feel exhausted, I sometimes go for a short walk to get some fresh air and clear my mind before I take quick nap at the office to recharge.

✓ If I still feel exhausted, I sometimes go for a short walk to get some fresh air and clear my mind before I take a quick nap at the office to recharge.

Missing article 'a' before 'quick nap' is an article error (mapped to present participle type here because sentence uses verb forms and participles). Insert 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× Not really if I feel tired, I usually prefer to stay home and rest because I want to recover properly.

✓ Not really. If I feel tired, I usually prefer to stay home and rest because I want to recover properly.

Run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation between the short answer 'Not really' and the following clause. Insert a period to separate them so each idea is a complete sentence.

× For example, I might take a short nap or watch a quiet movie so that I can be energetic when I see my friends the next day.

✓ For example, I might take a short nap or watch a quiet movie so that I can be energetic when I see my friends the next day.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included here to show that article usage is correct ('a short nap', 'a quiet movie').